h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

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bizzarely when I pulled it out of the old junk pile and read it, had no recollection at all of writing it. Knew I had because of the locations etc and because it said so on front of the script but not a clue where the story came from. In those days I was churning out one a week mind you!

Don't be too harsh...well, OK.
I'll just say you've got a lot better, then

You're right about the narrator, of course.
Speaking as a bit of a Harry, I'm kind of hoping that my eventual seduction will take place in a slightly more charged atmosphere
I don't much like the Deus-ex-Machina sort of ending either. OK, it's a shift darkwards, which is unusual, but it still comes across as a device to resolve the situation, rather than as completion.
Characterisation is good - though in this medium (ie an acted piece) I personally think that that's the least necessary element. Actors (and you'll know this better than me) can create the person if they have the plot and the motivation.
Suggestion : there is probably a way to rewrite this with the narration as a retrospective monologue from an unidentified character. The action between Harry and Emma is then in the past. The identity of the narrator could be revealed at the end.
Yeah, I haven't thought about it that much yet, you're right. I will, though. But you've got to tell me what you want me to do, exactly.
Pin (insanely jealous of Boots' foot-in-the-door, and claiming to have been using these brackets some long time BC [Before Canine])

Ta for all of that Pin and I think I agree with just about all of it.
The seduction bit wasn't though, there wasn't supposed to be a relationship so it shouldn't have been charged.
It was a very restrictive writing zone (24 minutes with commercial break and top and tail)and if dragged out memory serves me correctly I had intended for Harry to be the father but decided that was too gross and not likely to get past the Gods of the day. The brief was the twist however so there had to be something...format writing me boy!
I agree with the characterisation being the strongest but feel that Harry without the narrator would be very 2d. I like your idea of past tense, perhaps it should just be one character.
It's a very old meal so feel free to play. I would like to see how you twist it. Listening to the plays on r4, I realise that not only have the Gods barely changed but the format is almost set in stone, how did Alan Bennett ever sneak past them?
take care
boots (bowing in deference to superior brackets).

PS did I tell you that my business partner annoyed by the fact that I was spending too much time away from the bench scribbling, wrote a 55 thousand word book on accountancy of all things and had it accepted by the first publisher he sent it to! Don't you just hate that!

Waz sent me an amazing email today..so amazing I thought she waz the weddall. You have to swap addresses....orchid and Pin are perfect!
Seriously cool lady...seriously cool friend! She is just divine!
Take care old intellectual phociod.
boots

Hiya Boots
Side by side in the UG tomorrow, then. Couldn't have chosen a finer companion.
But Jodan really shouldn't squander all his Pure Gold at once, should he?
Pin

Hi Pin. There's posh. Honoured to be in such good company...where the hell do you find this underguide thingy?
take care boots

*ahem*

Well I thought it would be, but I have to send the entries in on Wednesday, rather than Friday, so it looks like both of yours will run next week. Or over the weekend.

(sorry to intrude )

Thanks for that Wolf and may all the jingles that jangle over Christmas be of the happy ever after white Christmas variety! Have a good one in Ohsoboringhio!
take care
boots

Hi Boots
You officially not useless any more or something?
Looks like you all had a great time on Saturday.
I am so kicking myself for chickening out. I was forgetful, and so left it very late to ask. And then didn't dare.
Sometime in the next few days, I'll ask the Weddell what she would have said. If she wouldn't have minded TOO much, I can maybe work on a pass for next time.
What a wimp.

Hi Pin

You've heard from Ben then, we said we'd give you a hard time Words like 'wuss' and 'chicken' were being bandied about.
Yes it was good fun. Scary but fun. Had to leave early unfortunately but will definitely go to another...a well weird planet but OK.
Ravager pup enjoyed himself too. Thought everyone was barking and was amused by the contingency from the dungeons and dragons federation, but on the whole he thought there were some interesting minds there.
Yes. Now boots. It's comfortable. Everything else still applies, the old, dog and useless bits but 'boots' is the voice. One step at a time eh?
take care

Ah, but if the Monstrous Regiment would just stop terrorising me for a while, I might come out of my shell

(btw, does Ben lurk here, do you reckon? Probably not . Thing is, now that I've seen her photo, she looks disconcertingly like...the Weddell )

Whoops that could take mind games into mine fields, 'thread' carefully!
Night Pin
boots

Big , dear friend.
You go and grow now.
Pin

Cheers mate. It feels better now it's actually arrived. You take care too and give that smelly fish a run for his money!
boots (off for a date with a carribean pirate )

So now the old dog has new tricks.
How's it feel, out the other side?

Wierd, Pin, wierd.
Sort of come to the end of my cunning plan and now need to make another.
Work experience today then time out with friends for 10 days at the end of the month. After that have to be proper grown up and make decisions.
Went to see a fellow student's girfriend's play last night at college 'oh to be young again!'
Have made some fine new friends which is good as some of my most favourite old one's are not doing too well, which is difficult.
It will sort itself, life does that
take care
boots (the reporter)

Wow boots
I read your journal.
What do you mean?
Maybe it doesn't matter. I'm moved anyway.
Pinniped(a little bit in awe)

Just a special friendship (non sexual) that somehow got messed up.
It hurts but then life's like that.
Thanks for being there friend.
take care
boots

Well, I just read your journal again.
You just look after yourself now.
(We are not alike. I use this place as escape, but you use seem to use it as catharsis)
Pin
(off to bed now, with thoughts set buzzing)

We are not so different. Escape and catharsis are just lexis in a different order with a few additional alphabetical sounds.
Anyone who lurks has issues.
Catharsis is good. Baby boots says I should be in psycho analasis, she is young and probably right.
I am old and know how to pull down the shutters...clever game.
Journal tonight told friends about the life behind the shutters, my thoughts...they have to choose.
Pin, it really is such a tiny arc in the circle of time...imagine...truly imagine, think the concept...an arc in the circle of time, awesome and tiny...go play my literary friend.
take care
boots