h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Lincolnshire, Maritime County of England - A6083903
Author: Galaxy Babe - U128652

My effort of my home county, for the 'Counties' project on the front page.

GB

I see you kept the section on Scunthorpe admirably brief.

B

Continuing on that front, would it be better to replace the place-name headers, with:

Important towns in Lincolnshire

Boston
Corby

etc etc...

Then the 'Places to Visit' Subheader would have to be in Bold.

I think as it currently looks, it's a bit same-y.

B

It would be a bit difficult to lump them together under one header, as Lincoln is a city, whereas Corby is a village.

Well, maybe 'settlements' would cover the whole whack.

I'd leave Corby out, personally, but each to their own.

B

Do you mind if I wait for a few more comments before deciding whether to change the entry?

Not at all. It's your Entry.

B

Hi, Galaxy Babe!

You have some great stuff here. for all the work you've done already!

The overall effect at the moment is a bit scrappy--a "can't see the wood for the trees" impression which I think is due to the amount of space you give the towns compared to the amount for the county as a whole.

One big change which I think would help a lot is to reorganise the geology and historical information at the beginning.
--Cut the King John section and put it in historical order after the Romans. A header of "Later History" can cover this and anything else from the Romans onwards.
--Remove the "Prehistoric Lincolnshire" header. The first header is "Geography and Geology" and what you have under "Prehistoric Lincolnshire" can be counted in as geology.
--Cut all the stuff about Spalding which is actually general description of the Fens and put into into the Geography/Geology section as a small paragraph about the Fens--it's a distinctive enough landscape that it deserves a clear mention in the general geography section.
--Under the "Later History" header I suggested, put: King John; add the mediaeval monasteries to the King John bit (they're too recent for the ancient archaeology bit); add a short paragraph about the draining of the Fens; World War I; the Great Flood (if you've got the Fens stuff more obvious, it will be clearer why the Great Flood affected Lincolnshire in particular); and the Hunting section all with sub-headers.
--Leave the Ghosts section till after the history.

The other big change I would suggest is to move *all* the Lincolnshire celebrities into one section at the end: Famous People from Lincolnshire. It's one thing to mention exactly where each was born, another to have the whole town section cluttered up with them. And anyone mentioned should be famous at a UK or international level, not just locally in Grimsby or Boston. I know that you have a much greater interest in personalities than I have, but I think that the sheer number of people you mention makes the entry rather unbalanced.
*Deep breath* I'd drop:
Mick Dawson; Lord John Hussey; Old Mother Riley; Patricia Hodge; Michele Dotrice; Vivean Gray; Julie Peasgood; Matthew Stiff; Della Dolan. They all seem to be fairly minor or even purely local celebrities. That still leaves you loads of people, and, as I said, if you put them all together it will make the geographic information about the localities clearer.


Azara

I've never heard of any of them, so I agree with Azara.

A couple of points: "Lincolnshire is one of the original 39 historic English counties, most of which survive today despite later Acts of Parliament, and in this case, reversal of that Act."

You haven't said which act you mean.

Also you have a typo in Stone Age in paragraph too.

More later, I have to go now.

Good entry though!

I object to the list of authors on this entry. GB has added lots of people who did not contribute to the entry at all - she just put a link to their entries in her entry. This does not entitle them to be put on the author list. It makes a mockery of the whole author list.

GB, I feel particularly annoyed because I already pointed out that this is wrong, and you've gone and put the entry into Peer Review anyway.

I will not review any more of your entries.

I think that's pretty harsh.

Not harsh. It just avoids disagreement. Gnomon doesn't like fights.

I hadn't noticed the author list before, still less the fact that I was co-credited for doing it. I appreciate Galaxy Babe's intentions for doing so, but find myself agreeing with Gnomon - it is pointless to add the authors of linked entries - they already have credit for their own entry.

B

I'm in agreement with Elentari.

Very well, I've wiped the author list.

I'm going to do the suggested alterations now.

GB

You should credit everyone who has provided a big contribution to this entry (ie if you used their unedited entry for info, or they wrote a paragraph etc) but not everyone whose entries you've linked to, as they are credited in their own entry.

OK, I'll go through the updated entry when I've finished and find out which was unedited work by other researchers, and add them as contributing researcher.

GB

I've done all the alterations suggested by Master B, Elentari and Azara.

Although I've left Lord Hussey in, because his house still stands and it's an excuse to link to the fantastic Henry VIII entry.

GB

I think it looks a lot better.

But......something seems to have gone wrong with your bullet points.

B

Thanks

which bullet points? They look alright to me, all encased in tags which Jimster likes.

GB

Odd. Each bullet has skipped a line for me.

B