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Researcher PSG Started conversation Mar 16, 2003
Entry: The Brittas Empire - The TV Series - A720389
Author: Researcher PSG [Minister of Impossibility and Improbability] - Peace! [Scout] - U110126
Hello
I've got to the point where I can't really think of what else to do with this entry. Any thought?
Researcher PSG
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Otto Fisch ("Stop analysing Strava.... and cut your hedge") Posted Mar 16, 2003
I remember this - superb at first, but increasingly hit and miss as time went on. I've a couple of suggestions -
Would it be possible to have a "quotes" section - the wit and wisdom of Gordon Brittas? Also, weren't there a number of massive continuity problems - I think he has twins in the first series who vanish completely. Or did I imagine that?
Good work!
Otto
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Oberon2001 (Scout) Posted Mar 16, 2003
Brilliant series, brilliant entry
Can't find much fault really. All I think you need to do is change the first word to "a" and... nope that's it.
Just out of my own personal curiousity, what series was it that he died, and then came back ('cos they didn't want him in heaven)?
Oberon2001
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Researcher PSG Posted Mar 17, 2003
Hello
I'm glad everyone so far seems so happy with the entry.
But the points that have been raised I will try to answer:
There isn't a contenuity error with the twins, the twins occured around the middle series (Given birth to by Helen in a bed in the middle of the high street tended by junior medical staff in fancy dress who had been pushing the bed for charity, if I remember correctly)
I think it was series 6 he came back from the dead, but I might be wrong.
I'll see if I can come up with quotes that stand up on their own, but I'm not sure I will find ones that work as text only.
erm..I think thats everything.
Researcher PSG
p.s. oh and I changed the An to an A.
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Zarquon's Singing Fish! Posted Mar 17, 2003
The first sentence of the first and second section aren't proper sentences, they're phrases. They need to be joined to the following sentences by a comma. If this makes the sentences too long, then they need to be restructured.
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Researcher PSG Posted Mar 20, 2003
Hello
Sorry I don't see the problem. They are the controlling ideas or claims of the paragraph. So if it's all the same I would rather leave this one to the sub, as I think I would end up doing more harm than good hacking around a problem I don't see.
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Kerr_Avon - hunting stray apostrophes and gutting poorly parsed sentences Posted Apr 1, 2003
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Lord Nigel Bores, K.S.C. Posted Apr 1, 2003
very well written. i loved the series. i noticed a few grammatical and spelling errors, but nothing too major. good luck.
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Peer Review: A720389 - The Brittas Empire - The TV Series
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- 2: McKay The Disorganised (Mar 16, 2003)
- 3: Researcher PSG (Mar 16, 2003)
- 4: Otto Fisch ("Stop analysing Strava.... and cut your hedge") (Mar 16, 2003)
- 5: Oberon2001 (Scout) (Mar 16, 2003)
- 6: Researcher PSG (Mar 17, 2003)
- 7: Zarquon's Singing Fish! (Mar 17, 2003)
- 8: Researcher PSG (Mar 20, 2003)
- 9: Researcher PSG (Mar 25, 2003)
- 10: Kerr_Avon - hunting stray apostrophes and gutting poorly parsed sentences (Apr 1, 2003)
- 11: Lord Nigel Bores, K.S.C. (Apr 1, 2003)
- 12: Researcher PSG (Apr 7, 2003)
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