h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

*rolls eyes*

*picks 'em up and rolls 'em back to you*

What must I do to get this picked????

Well Jack... could I suggest you get out you Editing hat, pop in a fresh pair of eyeballs and address all the points listed below and I'll recommend it (when I say 'address' if you disagree with any please post to that effect)

I have done my best to identify exactly where and what needs addressing


In Dragonball, The Plot, Footnote 3:
coresponding > corresponding

in Time for the Z:
Footnote 9 mistakingly > mistakenly
Footnote 8 writsts > wrists
Footnote 10 being sang > being sung

In Time for the Z, It's a what?!:
Footnote 11 permenant > permanent

In Time for the Z, The Plot and first paragraph of Signature Moves
's need removing and 's need adding

In Time for the Z, The Sagas:
I'm not clear what link there is between the two planets Vegeta and Namek is, if any.

-the Saiyan Saga:
Is it worth making clear in the description of the Saiyan Saga that Vegeta is not only the name of the planet Goku is from, but also (confusingly) the name of his cocky brother?

-the Namek Saga:
so if Piccolo dies > so when Piccolo dies (you have already mentioned he has been killed so it isn't conditional)

-the Garlic Jr. Saga:
it's up to Gohan and Krillin fight. > it's up to Gohan and Krillin to fight.

-the Trunks Saga:
except Gohan while Goku, himself will die > except Gohan, while Goku himself will die (misplaced comma)
antidode > antidote

-the Perfect Cell Saga:
but the Goku and friends > but Goku and his friends

-the Fusion Saga:
gotten stronger > become stronger
earth's fighter's > Earth's fighters

in History of the Saiyans:
's need removing and 's need adding

The Saiyans are the fictional race from the Planet Vegeta. Goku is one of them. The Saiyans are an aggressive warrior race that live to fight .. >
The Saiyans are an aggressive warrior race from the Planet Vegeta. Goku is one of them. The Saiyans live to fight .. (This cartoon is *all * fictional so it is unnecessary to say that the Saiyans are a "fictional race")

appearence > appearance
forget his saiyan heritage > forget his Saiyan heritage
They love to fight and, without their tails > They love to fight and without their tails (unneeded comma)
as did tyrant Frieza, knowing that he would be destroyed by a Saiyan warrior he purged the universe of all but four saiyans who weren't on Planet Vegeta at the time Frieza blew it up.>
as did the tyrant Frieza. Knowing that as he would be destroyed by a Saiyan warrior, Frieza purged the universe of all but four Saiyans who weren't on Planet Vegeta at the time he blew it up. (perhaps clearer)

These saiyans were > These Saiyans were
'scientific'.When > 'scientific'. When (spaces needed)

in the Cast:

-Goten: super saiyan > Super Saiyan
saiyan > Saiyan

-Piccolo: seperation occured > separation occurred

-Yamcha: until his saved Bulma > until he saved Bulma

-Vegeta: he is in many ways, Goku's equal > he is in many ways Goku's equal (unneeded comma)
Vegeta potrays > Vegeta portrays
He is the unfortunate of censorship, decapitating and blowning up many evil foes were edited out. He has been pivitol in the victory of many battles, though in any flashbacks, they delete any acknowledgement of his role >
His character suffers most from censorship, as he decapitates or blows up many of his foes. He has been pivotal in the outcome of many battles, though flashbacks tend to avoid any acknowledgement of his rôle (GML to get a circumflex over the o)



That should do it

Pimms

Aw COME ON!!!!

You're doing this on purpose!

What Spending hours preparing advice to assist you to create a good entry?

Sure I'm doing it on purpose . I'm not even holding my breath for any appreciation.

Pimms

Cat, believe me, it is worth it.

And just so you know, even when an entry is absolutely ready to be picked, the process takes a little time. Even if a scout picks it right away, he isn't allowed to tell you until the pick has been approved by Jimster, and that can take a few days (sometimes even a week - he is a busy guy!). So don't get too upset if things don't happen right away. I have faith that good things will happen here. And relatively soon at that.

Well I'll sort the spellings etc. out (AGAIN) when I have the... the... whenever I sort it...

Well, a Scout has recommended this entry for the Edited Guide - but don't cheer just yet. We won't be accepting this until all the comments have been acknowledged and amended in the entry. And that includes the tags, which were pointed out a good few pages pack. ... tags are used to create paragraphs.

As an aside, I have to say I'm a little disappointed to see someone bound by the Ace's Code of Conduct being so sullen and sulky to other volunteers who are trying to help this get into the Guide. Congrats to the Scouts who've perservered here as I'm certain it's been of benefit to the entry.

Let me know when the entry's ready and I'll give that big brass 'Accept' lever a heave.

Jims

See Cat it *was* worth the effort

Pimms
(... so just a few more bits to note that you have addressed)

My grumpiness aside, this is going to be a very strong entry, and I'm glad you've stuck at it.

Erm... the breaks are already sorted....

While you have eliminated the most annoying s, there are still about 28 of them left in the entry.

About 8 surely??

More than that. I used the "find" feature to count them all, and got 28. Because Microsoft Word made it easy for me, here is a version with all the s removed -- it's clear from this version that the "History of the Saiyans" section is what still needs paragraph-ing.

A1166528

Smeg.... All work and no play makes HPB etcetera...

Crikey and I thought I had a hard time with my typos! I hope this entry is picked before I finish my Melodrama entry as I would like to include a link to it!

I haven't forgotten about this by the way...

Done, finished, ended, complete, full, 100%.

Why did I need a circumflex over the 'o' in role?

well done HBP

re role circumflex I guess it is similar to Mallory's Everest comment - "because it's there" - although it can be spelled without the hat since the accent *can* be included in GML, it should be.

Pimmsaloonie (if one is going to be picky, be *really* picky)