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Entry: Teotihuacan - A9041168
Author: Cardi-Bling a yo ho ho and a barrel of rum - U1619796

Another finished entry from my old Cities of Mesoamerica project (A9041924) which I'm splitting up into indivual peer review entries...this is the second of the series!

Very good CB - Gee but I hate mysteries.

One slight typo for you - "Further north along the Avenida de los Muertos sits the whilst Pyramid of the Moon and the Palaces of the Jaguar and Quetzal-butterfly." - I think an earlier edit has left a spurious whilst.

Also in the last sentance you have a bee instead of a be.

Cheers Mckay...changes made!

Good work

Nitpicks:

The 'á' (with the acute acent) in Teotihuacán should be used consistantly throughout.

Teh-oh-tih-wah-KAN --> Pronounced 'Teh-oh-tih-wah-KAN'.
the Avenue of the Dead --> The Avenue of the Dead.
(And full stops on all the footnotes please.)

"The Teotihuacán was founded near a site of permanent water"
Yes, it's an important commodity, but what exactly do you mean? Lakes, rivers, geysers, oases, wells, springs?

"which like most Mexican ruins is surprisingly cheap at around $3.50 US"
I'm afraid you'll have to lose the "at around $3.50 US" - inflation and all means that the price will change soon enough.

Since you have two links for the same word, I would recommend adding TITLE attributes (</LINK&gt to describe the pages they link to better, and putting one or both of them in a references section (...links...</GUIDE&gt

Alex

One thing I notice from a five-second scan, you should probably change some of the subheaders to headers...

*goes to have a closer look*

I also see in place that you write AD and A.D. Without periods is the perferred way.

Artefacts - Artifacts

Priest were very

Priests were..

And If you are going to refer to 'this Researcher' or 'one Researcher', I think they like it capitalised.

Fabulous entry.

Interesting read, Cardi-Bling; anything more to add or change?

I don't think they've made the original changes yet

Changes made...except I think artefacts, as far as my spell checker can work out that is the correct British English spelling and so that's the version I'll use in the guide, artifacts is perhaps the American English spelling?

I can't do a spell check, but there are some very tiny nitpicks which you could fix before a Scout happens along wanting to pick it.

Introduction
city of Teotihuacán1 was home for almost --> city of Teotihuacán1 was home to almost

the builder’s culture had --> the builders' culture had

Location
It is located in the Central Highlands, at around 20°N Latitude. The city is in a fertile valley with mountains around it. (I'm not a fan of short, jerky sentences) --> The city is located in a fertile valley in the Central Highlands at around 20°N latitude.

History
and was a major commercial when it was --> and was a major commercial centre when it was

they brought ideas of astronomy --> they brought knowledge of astronomy

however it wasn’t an occupy force --> however it wasn’t an occupying force

area of some 22.5 kilometres squared --> some clever researcher will come along and tell you how to write a superscript-2

period from 4 when --> you need to remove the spac between the 'from' and the tag

The City
some 2km's of --> some two kilometeres of

wide road that’s broken into --> wide road that is broken into

a huge 215 feet tall (65m) --> a huge 215 feet (65m) tall

Pyramid of Cheops then the Pyramid of Khafre --> Pyramid of Cheops and the Pyramid of Khafre

Religion
Sun, Moon>, and Quetzalcoatl --> a strange > has appeared

They were the representations of the Gods --> previously you haven't capitalised gods. I'm not sure, but I think that modern convention is to capitalise God, Allah etc, but not gods.

also in charge of the human sacrifices and human bones of the sacrificed --> also in charge of the human sacrifices bones of the sacrificed (the second 'human' is somewhat redundant)

There were four symbols that were the most important for the Teotihuacános. These were the jaguar, the serpent, the snail, and the bird. --> The symbols of the jaguar, the serpent, the snail and the bird were the four most important symbols for the Teotihuacános

The city of Teotihuacán declined from one of biggest metropolitan cities in Mexico in the fifth and sixth centuries AD to virtual abandonment in the seventh and eighth centuries AD Although archaeologists can document the actual abandonment of the city, there is little evidence pointing to why it may have been abandoned. (there's bit of repetition, and a missing full stop) --> The city of Teotihuacán declined from one of the biggest metropolitan cities in Mexico during the fifth and sixth centuries to a virtual ghost town in the seventh and eighth centuries AD. Although archaeologistscan document the actual abandonment of the city there is little evidence pointing to why this happened.

Teotihuacán Today
Teotihuacán today is one of the most visited ancient sites in modern Mexico sat just outside the capital Mexico City it makes a fascinating day trip. --> Teotihuacán today is one of the most visited ancient sites in modern Mexico: sitting just outside the capital Mexico City it makes a fascinating day trip.

You can still climb the mighty Pyramid of the --> It is possible to climb the mighty Pyramid of the

one of Teotihuacán most amazing --> one of Teotihuacán's most amazing

This sounds like an incredible place!!


psst!if you do this quick I know of a scout looking for picks this week...

Cheers Sho, I'm glad you enjoyed the entry I've made your suggested entries so hopefully that tame scout of yours maybe around later!

If you enjoyed this entry you may enjoy reading the one I have written on the Aztec city of Tenochtitlan - A9041816 its with the subs at the moment...

Got to crack on with my other Mesoamerican cities entrys soon...Chitzen Itza's (A9041825) next

I'm sure that scout is around right now...

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works!!!

Hi CB,

I've been given your fine entry to subedit, and the result is at A14353995. If you spot anything that needs attention, please drop me a note.

SchrEck Inc.

Wow great edit and after writing 15 solo entries this is my first entry to get an image...dead chuffed with that!