h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A394607

Thanks to the Infinite Improbility Drive, I've stumbled over this article on a oft-depicted part of America's history. The author unfortunately got lost during Rupert.

hmm, it reads good, indeed -- but I'd doubt if the contents are really factual. At least, the indians/natives are missing!

Any comments from a descendent from a shootout winner?

A few minorities:

1. on the end of the 6th paragraph (if you count a single row as a paragraph):
"And not only were they were right, but they established the principle that modern America is based on."
Something is with all the "were"s.

2. A minority but still: A MAJOR NAMECHANGE SHOULD TAKE PLACE.
Something along the line of "The true story of wild west gnfights" will be nice, as this hardly begins to cover the true subject of the thing.

Other then that it's pretty good I like now we eat


Dancer

another thing totally missing is the fact that "the wild west" was an effect that on the edge of society, as the gunmen raced away from the law, and the law struggled to catch up. in total, it only lasted for fifteen years or so.

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'Peer Review' to 'The Flea Market'.

I think I'll take this one.

So... I'll take into account what was already said, but there's alot more to say... please comment away, I'll still follow this thread.


Dancer

The entry is at http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A670123

I didn't do anything yet, just made it GuideML and added 3 bullets.


Dancer

Changed the title, fixed it abit and added xyroth'es part.

Tell me what you think please.


Dancer

Hi Dancer,

it looks good now, ready for the Edited Guide, I think. Just a rather small nitpick: you should replace the double quotes (") by single ones ('). If you don't, then the Subbie will for sure...

Good work,
SchrEck Inc.

Thanks, Will do


Dancer