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William "Billy" Connolly -- since you have given his full name in the previous sentence, you don't need to do it again. You should only give his full title of William once. I suggest this one, and change the one attached to the quote to just plain Billy COnnolly.

people maybe taken a back --> people may be taken aback

Connolly was born 11lb on 24 November, 1942 to Mary -- the 11lb looks a bit out of place. This would be better as:

Connolly was born on 24 November, 1942, an 11lb baby, to Mary

a delivery boy at a bookstore --> a delivery boy at a bookshop (use British English)

remembers his medical vividly the doctor said -- add a colon after vividly

In 1965 Connolly finished his 5 year apprenticeship as a shipyard welder -- you've already told us it was a 5-year apprenticeship, and that he was a shipyard welder, so this is repetition. Say it as:

In 1965, Connolly finished his time as a welder

My name's Billy Connolly -- you really don't need to add a line to this saying who said it.

for one thing to see Elton -- add a colon after thing

Yes I mean attended to everything else.

Yes I saw a tiny bit of Dame Edna last night.

Gnomon

adhered to everybody's comments now. peeps

A18620336 - Billy Connolly -Comedian
Author - Opticalillusion

The word "adhered" appears to be stuck in your brain

Which bit of Dame Edna did you see?

for the link.

The bit with Edna's daughter and the bath.

You didn't see Tracy Emin?

no, why?

She was talking about Billy, at least I think she was. I can barely understand her.

tried looking for stuff on this but had little .

However, I did come across a few quotes and consequently put them in and re-ordered a bit.

Post 36 in the backlog I said: <>
reating?

It still says "reating haemorrhoids"

how is farting in spacesuits controversial ?

the way you treat his songs makes it sound like he was only a parody artist, he does do non parody comedy songs as well


the entry's title is :
Billy Connolly -Comedian

needs a space in there

I'm in favour of farting in spacesuits.

dealt with GB's points and Jon's except the spacesuit thing as i'm now confused what people want me to do.

Never mind the spacesuit, Opti. It's ok as it is.

Can you confirm that Connolly was making ads for alcohol-free Kaliber while he was addicted to drink and drugs?

not for definite no

THen I suggest you move the sentence about Kaliber to the bit where he is recovering from drug addiction.

do you mean drink. I'm confused. I'll leave the sentence here until i know where its got to go.

He even appeared in advertisements promoting the low alcohol drink substitute Kaliber.

Kaliber is not low-alcohol, it is no alcohol.

It is also debatable if it is a drink substitute!

so is the kaliber thing the only thing stopping this from being picked?