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Mostly being stubborn I'll have a go at it again!

A17300323 - 'Roundabout Dogs'
U153664 Milla (Alchemilla Digitalis)


and a page flipping preventor.

A bit of your text, some changes to mine... Any better now?

Top notch, makes perfect sense to me

Well, the construction of the first sentence isn't as I would put it, but let the native speakers have their say.

The first sentence of the Entry? I'd remove the comma after roundabouts so it reads 'roundabouts all over Sweden.

Neither would I, B'El, but I also wanted to come as close as possible to their wording...

Now, may I add you as contributors somehow?

oh, and being REALLY picky, I think it should be home-made, a hyphenated word, but I'm not sure, so you can leave it as is.

To add as contributors I recommend the Credits tags. Place these in your GuideML between the Body and Guide tags at the end of the Entry -


Researcher name


Of course substitute the ****** for the U Number of the person you want to credit, and REsearcher name put their name they use in, for example, Belana

LIke this -


Belana


You can add as many REsearchers as you like by putting more of them in like this -


Researcher name
Researcher name
Researcher name


Does that make sense?

T hanks Milla , but no need to add me, I'm just doing what Peer reviewers do, I haven't added signficant information o the entry.

That's sweet B'El, I'll just add Matt then.

tonight...

No need to add me either Milla, really. This is all yours

to you both! Thanks for all your help and advice!

Is there any more I need to do to the piece now?

It's really good, Milla, but I'd consider some minor rephrasing of a couple of sentences:

It was indeed placed on the roundabout! I suggest you drop the sentence and mention the roundabout either in the following or the preceding sentence.

I'd prefer just 'concrete bone'.

You don't actually say what happened to the original dog. It was vandalised, but was it also stolen or discarded before the other one arrived?

An odd tense. I'd prefer something like 'Roundabout Dog spotters have a wonderful time observing the styles...'

You can't have a wonderful time observing a sad prospect. How about something like: 'Roundabout Dog spotters have a wonderful time observing the styles and the dates of appearance, but there is always the sad prospect of their removal by traffic authorities, as they can be regarded as a distraction to drivers and a traffic hazard.'

Icy

You are so right!

I'll have a go at it, but bedtime has struck (?) and I am too tired to make a good work of it now... tomorrow will have to do.

You're getting all the posts, you know!

I had three week gaps betwen postings on my last entry! But every time I log in, it's "18 new posts", "11 new posts", "6 new posts"... I am insanely !

Of course, it could just be that you wrote the better entry, but whatever...

I make a fair number of posts myself...

Latest news! No longer illegal!!!!

Entry updated according to this and Icy's comments.

An interesting and amusing tale.
Is there any way to expand it? For example this legal change, did it come about by a test case or is it a response to popular demand/directly related to PVK activity?

Would 'The Roundabout Dogs of Sweden' work as a title?

I think 'folk art' or 'contemporary folk art' may work better in English than 'Naivistic'.

Thanks again for comments - I think I got most of them taken care of, but if I missed any, please let me know.

I'd like to keep it fairly short, and not expand on the legal part, where roundabout dogs were declared 'not against the regulations'. I'm not aware of any law that could make them more illegal than say, For Sale signs, more than the general 'don't create a hazardous distraction'. However, they have now got some kind of general 'go ahead, if you must'... And this, I have no idea on how to fit in the little story without killing the 'dog' story.

Are we reasonably happy with it?