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Entry: New Hampshire, USA - A12623267
Author: RevKeltina - U4594965

I'm working on the article requested for the state of New Hampshire. Any advice or suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thank you.

Glad to see you have found your way around.

'The state of New Hampshire can be found on any map of the United States in the New England region.'

Though this is correct and true, I find this statement rather odd. It seems to just state the pretty obvious. Maybe you could skip this and start off the entry with something like'

'New Hampshire, located in New England, USA is bordered on the North and Northwest by Quebec, Canada; to the South by Massachusetts...'

Also, with the line that says ''The Granite State": to me, that seems to stick out, and doesn't seem to to look right just sitting there disconnected like that. So maybe you could work that in somewhere else. Maybe:

'New Hampshire, affectionatley knows as 'the Granite State', is located in New England, USA is bordered on the North and Northwest by Quebec, Canada; to the South by Massachusetts...'

Or even in the title:

'New Hampshire, USA - the Granite State'

Welcome aboard! Glad to see another geographic entry in the making. And you've got the guideML down pat too.

Just two things for starters:

you should probably include a list of things to see when you visit NH.

Also, do a quit checkover for typos and stuff - it makes it harder to read.

Looking forward...

Thanks a bunch!! It has been over 20 years since I had to "write a paper" on something and I find everything I used to know about it has taken a vacation somewhere in my brain cells! I will use your ideas to improve!!

Righto. I'll stay subscribed. When you're ready for another look-thru just yell.

*knock*knock*

Anyone in?

...comes to the door, mop and bucket in hand.....

hi... i am just cleaning up a bit... she should be back shortly, i think

. .. . .looks for nametag over in A12623267.. . . .. .

nope. not there. Though that does look like a good entry if it could just be finished ... then we would only have Oklahoma to finish and the states would be complete!

oops i mean you... not we... ive done nothing on this site then you would only have Oklahoma to finish.

There's still no EG Entry on New Hampshire, but this is a very good start. If the author fails to return, perhaps the Eds could move this to the Flea Market so as to give someone else some inspiration

Over a year since the author has posted, propose a move to the Flea Market for this Entry

Matt

Seconded.

My, Matt, you were bored today

Not bored, just getting some stuff lined up for the <./>Scavengers</.>