h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: New Hampshire, USA - A12623267
Author: RevKeltina - U4594965

I'm an American and don't know for sure if the spelling and syntax are appropriate for international readers. Comments and suggestions would be very helpful.

use oxford dictionary.now enjoy the poem.

Unheeded Life
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Little hope;
Wide life,
Day and night,
Goes right.
Every morning,
Joyous sun;
Midday heat,
Becomes fun.
Reddish east,
Stopped the game;
New game,
New name.
Hot pan,
Flavors night;
Wheat cake,
Blessed sight.
Happy couple,
Straw pallet;
Real pleasure,
Lusty bed.
Every morrow,
Every night,
Every struggle;
Every fight,
Little hope;
Wide life,
Day and night,
Goes right.
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Hi there RevKeltina, welccome to h2g2!

It's a good entry, it ought to be lengthend a bit, however.

The main thing is that this is in the wrong forum. Since this is Edited Guide potential it should be in either Peer Review or, since it could use a bit more work first, The Edited Guide Writing Workshop, which is what I recommend. Once it is sucsessful EGWW you can then put it in PR.

But it is a very good start! You can remove this from AWW by clicking 'x' next to you entry on the forum list, then going back to the 'Submit for Review' page and choose EGWW.