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A45740009 - Egg Shell Mimicry Advice for Young Lady Cuckoos

Post 1

Tibley Bobley

Entry: Egg Shell Mimicry Advice for Young Lady Cuckoos - A45740009
Author: Tibley Bobley - U170471

Using the Stretcher Challenge to indulge my fascination with cuckoos. There's a lot more interesting stuff about cuckoos besides their egg shell mimicry. I had to stop myself.

I know it's a bit short for a lecture but it is for a class of birdssmiley - winkeye

smiley - smiley


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Post 2

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

smiley - rofl This is funny.

And as mean as a cuckoo.

The next logical step might be an inspirational book for future business executives on how to learn from cuckoos.

You could see it at Harvard Business School.smiley - rofl

An excellent use of all that ornithological knowledge. And a good connection with the shell theme.smiley - smiley


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Post 3

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Ms GBsmiley - biro


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Post 4

Danny B

smiley - laugh

Neatly done, and very entertaining smiley - ok

Good luck for the rest of the competition! smiley - goodluck


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Post 5

Merry Anne

Well done. Entertaining and educative in a very subtle way. smiley - ok


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elekragheorgheni

Wow! This was really terrific. Fascinating information adroitly written. Loved Madame Chairbird and her handling of the group
dynamics of the session. smiley - applause


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Post 7

Tibley Bobley

Thank you kindly all! Very grateful for your encouraging commentssmiley - biggrin

And the best of luck to my fellow stretcherssmiley - goodluck

smiley - smiley


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Post 8

Beatrice

Good luck to you too!

This is my first time venturing into AWW (I know, the shame...) so I'm not too sure what sort of comments to make.

I thought the piece was lovely - amusing, well laid out and informative too. There were just 2 places where my brain had to stop and re-read: one was on the size of the eggs, I couldn't work out if they were bigger or smaller. And the other was at the end, where it announced next week's lecture, closely followed by tomorrow's lesson.

How refreshing to read something so original smiley - applause


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minorvogonpoet

This is fun smiley - laugh and yet manages to convey quite a lot of information about cuckoos. This is a neat trick.

I agree with Beatrice about the end being a little confusing. It might be an idea to swap the references to 'next week's lecture' and 'tomorrows lesson.'


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Post 10

Tibley Bobley

Thank you Beatrice and mVpoetsmiley - ok

I can see that you're both quite right about the confusing bits and I've altered them. If they still seem at all unclear, let me know and I'll have a further furkle.

smiley - smiley

PS Very honoured to be the first in AWW to benefit from your wisdom Beatricesmiley - bigeyes


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Post 11

frenchbean

It paints a great picture, TB smiley - ok And I have the speaker in a mortar board, for some reason smiley - weird


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Post 12

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

Yeah, little birdie with mortarboard and pince-nez.smiley - rofl


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Post 13

LL Waz

smiley - biggrin neat.

Felt like yelling 'lay off those dunnocks!' from the back of the class.


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Post 14

Trout Montague

Clever.


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Post 15

Tibley Bobley

Oh yes. I think she'd have to wear a mortarboard and pince-nez. And if she'd had hair, it would've had to be iron-grey and scraped back into a severe, rock-hard bunsmiley - laugh

I've got a soft spot for dunnocks too Waz. Nice, well mannered little birds. They almost give the impression of being too polite to refuse to baby-sit for those terrible, 'unnatural' motherssmiley - chick

Thanks folkssmiley - ok


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Post 16

UnderGuide Editors

Hello again TB, smiley - smiley. Not sure I should offer more smiley - bubbly but it's double smiley - bubblysmiley - bubbly for being the UnderGuide QA's 'Gem of the Month' (for January's UG picks).

For the QA comment on this - see the Stretcher judge comment - the QA had nothing new to add smiley - winkeye.

Thanks TB, and thanks to the Stretcher organisers too - we had more Stretcher pieces in February's picks.

UG Eds


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Post 17

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - bubblysmiley - chicksmiley - bubbly


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Post 18

Tibley Bobley

Oh, I say! Thank you very muchsmiley - biggrin

I think I must have had too muchsmiley - bubblysmiley - bubbly

smiley - crySo happysmiley - wah

smiley - drunk


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Post 19

Merry Anne

Wonderful. smiley - applausesmiley - bubbly


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