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A47921817 - A Devillish Affair

Post 1

Danny B

Entry: A Devillish Affair - A47921817
Author: Danny B. [Musicians' Guild (U150368); Science EXplained (A4108330); Curator; Scavenger] - U182633

Entry for Round 4 of The Stretcher (A47534448). As with my last Entry, this is in the AWW only for the competition and will be removed after the judging. I don't expect anyone (except the judges, of course) to actually wade through all of this smiley - smiley

smiley - cheers


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Post 2

Secretly Not Here Any More

Win.


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Post 3

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

I enjoyed this.

And I hate detective stories.smiley - winkeye

Good job.


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Post 4

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - biro

Ms GB


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Post 5

minorvogonpoet

Very clever, witty smiley - laugh and congratulations on writing a story of this length with double-letter words.

A couple of points:
The sentence beginning 'My brother was died from' should presumably read 'has'.
The sentence beginning 'Apparently Titivillus' ends in printed -no double letter!


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Post 6

Danny B

"The sentence beginning 'My brother was died from' should presumably read 'has'."

I tweaked that sentence late last night before submitting. Obviously I didn't tweak it enough!

smiley - biro

"The sentence beginning 'Apparently Titivillus' ends in printed -no double letter!"

smiley - wah

Oh well, there had to be one... Fixed now.

smiley - cheers


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Post 7

Trout Montague

Great stuff.

I'd like to think Bels would have been impressed.


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Post 8

Danny B

Thanks, Trout - I did have Bels in mind when I wrote it, so that means a lot smiley - ok


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Post 9

elekragheorgheni

This was brilliant! A fine story and interesting thoughout!smiley - applause


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Post 10

Danny B

Thank-you! smiley - smiley


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Post 11

Tibley Bobley

Very goodsmiley - applause

smiley - smiley


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Post 12

aka Bel - A87832164

Wonderful. Why do you want to take it out once the stretcher is finished?


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Post 13

Danny B

Because I don't think it works as a stand-alone story. You need to know the that it was a response to a specific challenge about double letters.


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Post 14

aka Bel - A87832164

I wouldn't think so. It probably helps if you know Sam Spade, though. smiley - smiley


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Post 15

Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor

For what it's worth, I think it works as a stand-alone story.

Sure, the idea comes from the challenge, but as an intertextual jeu d'esprit, it definitely works.smiley - smiley


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Post 16

Beatrice

I hope it gets extra marks for the hootoo reference smiley - ok


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Post 17

minorvogonpoet

I think it works as a stand alone story.smiley - smiley

Because we know from the beginning that this is parody, we don't expect the crime to be realistic.


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Post 18

Danny B

Well, it now seems that I'll lose marks if I remove this from the AWW, so I suppose it's staying! smiley - smiley

Many thanks to everyone for their kind comments - they are much appreciated smiley - cheers


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Post 19

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - magic


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Post 20

aka Bel - A87832164

That's great news, EDanny. I'm glad I wasn't the only one thinking it would be a shame if you removed this from the AWW. smiley - smiley


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