h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Introducing Ghana - A9433604
Author: Wilma Neanderthal - Got a PR peeve? Go to A9741972: The Nearly but Not Quite 'Official' PR Discussion Forum - U2192551

Here goes!

W

Cool entry!

It's not clear to me whether it should be highlife (lowercase, one word) or High Life (caps, one word). Right now, it looks inconsistent.

The sentence with both education and the dam in it reads awkwardly. Break it into two?

There appear to be some italicized sections of your article, starting with "the notion that". I can't tell what you are meaning to emphasize here. Were these words drawn from the newest constitution?

Hi Sea Change,

Thanks for reading this

Of course, you're right. I have taken out the first high life and substituted music

The quotes in the elder section and are from the documentation and commentaries surrounding the final formalisation process. Those under Jerry Rawlings are from a locally written history of the time. Should I take out the italics and insert ' ' instead? I'll go and check the guidelines...

I have reworded the last bit on Nkrumah and moved it into its own paragraph. I think it reads better, does it?

"Nkrumah borrowed heavily to finance his dreams for Ghana. He was a visionary leader with many grand plans. His greatest achievement was to make education universally free from nursery to university. However, his fabulous project, the Akosombo Dam on the Volta River, took over ten years to bring the electricity and irrigation promised and by 1966, Ghana was 1 billion US Dollars in debt. Nkrumah's nepotism and overspending and the corruption rife among his officials had decimated the nation."

Thanks again, SC

W

I like the new paragraph.

I'm thinking that if you put quotes in the middle of your sentences instead of the italics, I would still be wondering who it was you were quoting.

I didn't spot this the first time, but you mention that slavery was abolished. By whom? All four of the nations exploiting Ghana, or by the United States their main customer?

Sorry it took so long - I have learnt how and when slavery ended What I did not realise is that the slave trade was "banned" before actual slavery was "abolished"... I have put the date line into a footnote and also removed the italics. I paraphrased one lot and added a footnote with a source for the other one. I think that works, but do let me know what you think.

Wilma

Looking good. The only thing I can think to add now is a link to the Edited Entry on Accra.

Aaah, yes, links...

I spent three hours on it last week - got it all looking brilliant and wittily linked to all sorts - then (stoopid) forgot to copy the edits before uploading and.. yep, lost the lot I haven't quite worked up the spirit to start over - but I guess that will be my task for today



W

I have scoured hootoo and inserted all the links I found - and I have added some BBC ones and a couple of external ones also.

Also added a section on travelling by tro-tro truck under the Kumasi heading and realised I have to expand on the Adinkra if only to explain the "sayings" on the trotro trucks... and I haven't written about Juju, yet...

Off to do a bit of research now...

W

Hi Wilma - have only skimmed so far, but was wondering, what is the meaning of the "A History Byte" header? Did I miss it in the text?

Ahh yes, I forgot I left that in. Initially I had only written a tiny piece on history - hence the "byte" and for catching that
W

Hi Wilma, great entry, I never knew all of this before reading it.

Hi B,

Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed reading it. I am loving writing it. I have just added a brilliant quote on juju and political implications by a very brave Ghanaian reporter

Off to seek Adinkra next.

W

I have included a small section on fabric and proverbs. There is too much information to include all of it here. The paragraph is called 'Speaking Fabric'... corny?
W

Great topic, Wilma. I will read it more carefully - and review it - when I am not three-parts asleep



G'night

Take your time, Babe

I have changed the title to Ghana, West Africa.

W

Dr WEB Du Bois (remove the full-stops)

The last Header "Caveat" - you need to pop tags around the text following it

Amazingly informative entry, well done Wilma

Any chance you could trim down the footnotes a bit? There are rather a lot of them.

Hello, ladies.

Annie, I have corrected the and the ... Thank you for liking this it helps that I grew up there, btw - just in case you think I am a genius

and EMR, I have worked footnotes into the text. I think I had taken the easy way out and just dumped stuff down there. I now have a paragraph on the abolition of slavery dateline and added a food section

I was at an International Food Fair this afternoon, serving my Lebanese nosh and I had the Ghanaians next to me - and they had kelewele (my favourite). I kept hoping they would need a break and ask me to look after their stall It didn't happen, but we did share at the end of the evening (my falefel for a bowl of kelewele ) Fair trade or what?

They're all gone!

Thanks.

We aim to please