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Entry: The surprisingly awesome museum of osteology - A87816775
Author: demosthenes - U14999864

I fixed some of the problems thank you guys for all of your advice!

*giggles*

Sorry Demosthenes, you really need to 'Research' your subject matter

What you have put so far is like saying 'King Tut lived a long, long time ago and was buried with a lot of gold objects' - all true, but hardly Edited Guide material, whereas a fully researched Edited Guide Entry is turned into this: A517114

I know it's frustrating, but sadly there are no short cuts in Peer Review


lil x

Posted in old thread, under the Entry.

F S

The author re-submitted this Entry after it was sent back to his Personal Space.

I'm giving the author a chance to improve this Entry up to the standard required and this time will send it to the Writing Workshop

He gives a link to the website Museum of Osteology, which will provide enough information for a review of this place. It seems a good enough subject for an Entry.

http://www.museumofosteology.org/

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Note to demosthenes:

Take some time to read a few of our other Entries in the Guide, so that you know how long your Entry should be.

You should have an introductory paragraph - a short description of the purpose of the museum, where it is located and the sorts of people who would find this museum interesting and educational.

Then a section with paragraphs for all the various departments, describing them accurately.

A final summary of why this museum is worth a visit..

Do not use the first person in your writing. (eg 'I think...')

Lanzababy

Hey, great topic, but could you maybe give sub-headers, and explain what people are most likely to see there, why it would be a good place to visit, and even give more info on some of the artifacts they are in possession of?