h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Ealing - A5983680
Author: ssbookworm12488 - U730741

hi there, this was in peer review b4 but i didn't post it, and had no knowledge till today. Anyway rewrote the entry and would like some opinions.

thanks

A couple of typo’s for you to correct…

The area known today as Ealing was infact several villages surrounded by fields and orchards, until the coming of the railway in the Victorian era. The railway brought development, and the villages were gradually swallowed up by buildings and old country lanes became busy roads, as London expanded. Many of the areas however have maintained the use of their old village names, for example Little Ealing, Northfields, Perivale, Pitshanger, West Ealing (which was previously known as Ealing Dean)and Hanwell.

Infact. This should be two words.

…previously known as Ealing Dean)and…

you need a space after Dean)



Today, even the main shopping centre in Ealing Broadway is suffering as consumers travel to larger shopping centres further away, though there is hope that Ealing will not lose out too much due to a possible development of one of the local council carpark's into a new shopping centre, but this is still in the planning stages.

Carpark’s. This should be two words.


For many people, one of the best things about Ealing is the parks and open spaces. Ealing is lucky in many respects as there are quite a few dotted about and while some are simply areas of grass with a small childrens playground, others have bowling greens and tennis courts, or historic features left over from the time when they were gardens to a country house.

Childrens. This should be children’s



Walpole park is a good example, being the gardens to Pitshanger Manor, which presently hosts art exhibitions and local events. The park still has many features from its time as the Manor's gardens, including fountains and ornamental ponds. More recent additions since it became a public park are childrens play area, tennis courts, a cafe open in the summer and a wildlife area which has been home to many animals over the years and has recently been saved by local residents who opposed the council after they closed the area saying it was too expensive to look after the animals and maintain the enclosures.

The same with childrens in this para too.

Walpole park. Should park have a capital P?




Gunnersbury Park is another good example, being part of the old Gunnersbury estate owned by the Rothschilds a well known banking family from 1835. Gunnersbury house has been run as a museum since 1929, displying various exhibitions about the history of Ealing and Hounslow. The park has a boating lake, nine-hole golf course, football and cricket pitches, childrens play area and a cafe open in the summer months.

The same with the word childrens in this para too.

Displying is wrong. Should be displaying.




One of Ealing's most famous buildings is Ealing Studios. Since 1904 when William George Parker bought the site known as West lodge, many films have been made in Ealing including Battle of Waterloo ans Jane Shore. However, the most well known Ealing films are its post war comedies after the Studios were taken over by a production company which became Ealing Studios Ltd. These include Passport to Pimlico(1949), Kind Hearts And Coronets(1949), The Lavender Hill Mob(1951) and the Ladykillers(1955). In the mid-fifties the studios were sold to the BBC, where a number of BBC programmes were made, for example Colditz and Fortunes of War. The site is now run by Fragile Films, who planned to make feature films again at this site, the first, a remake of The Importance of being Ernest in 2001. The studios have also been rented out for films such as Star Wars - episode 2, and Notting Hill, as well as TV productions such as The Royle Family.

After Pimlico you should have a space before the date. The same with the other dates too. Put a space between the name of the film and the date.

Typo after “Battle of Waterloo” you have ans instead of and.




Was divided into 3 screens in the 1970's due to demand to show a larger number of films in smaller screens.

I think this should start with “This was…”



All the other cinemas have been demolished, including the Walpole (though its facade was left) and in 2005 the cinema at the junction of Northfields Avenue and The Uxbridge road, which has made way for a block of apartments which unfortunately are not in keeping with the local area. This cinema was first opened as the Kinema and then was rebuilt as the Lido in 1928. Although most recently had been used for bingo and snooker and Asian films, the building had fallen into disrepair. The corner it still affectionately known by locals as The Lido, even with the current developers plans to name the flats, Galloway Court. Residents are unsure as to the origins of this name as no body by the name of Galloway has been particulary influential to the ares development.

….particulary influential to the ares development. Two typo’s here. Should be “particularly influential to the areas development”.




Unfortunately, arguably one of the ugliest buildings in Ealing is it's hospital. Recently appearing on an under cover documentary about "filthy hospitals" it is in the bottom third of hospitals in the UK, and its standard of care leaves a lot to be desired, though on the good side many of the staff go out of their way to help as much as possible.

Ugliest buildings in Ealing is it’s hospital. It’s should be its.




There looks more typo’s than there actually is. I just wanted to make sure you knew which paragraph I was talking about so you could easily amend them.

F2636459?thread=2299473 - previous PR thread.

SSbookworm, you need to read those posts and take note of what the reviewers said. You can edit the entry while it's in Peer Review, then update (save the changes) then post here when you've finished.

Thanks