h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

*wanders in, tripping over all the nitpicking and twiddly bits*

Glad you're still pushing forward with all the entries MizzP

I promise to read this when I get home tonight. Hold me to that...if I don't then you can poke me.

Okay so I'm just bookmarking entries before my train arrives...

Kat

"I didn't want to go too indepth about Baden powell himself as I don't know a lot about him other than his connection with Guiding"

"I know this but the entry is about Lord Baden-Powell hence there not being much referance to the other two"

Hmm. I'm starting to have some difficulty here, MP. The above are both responses you've made. It seems to me that you're going to have to put in a short biographical note about B-P himself, along the lines of what I suggested earlier. It needn't be "great depth"; just a couple of sentences.

no probs


*goes off to juggle all these entries*

I don't know if I'm comming or going!!!

It gets like that!

I think this entry would work much better if you turned into either a) 'The birth of the Scouting and Guiding movements' and did a lot more research (you are a researcher after all!) about the birth of Scouting, or b) a biography of Baden-Powell, and did a lot more research into his life, and just made mentions of Scouting and Guiding. As it is, I don't think it really works as it makes you ask more questions than it answers.

You inspired me to write an entry about Olave B-P, so I did I've stuck it in PR, so feel free to have a wander over to A4523780 and peer away

Right I've added a few extra bits on the history side

Can you put and round all your paragraphs please?

yep just getting round to it

Nice Entry Mizzpinky A link for Lord Baden-Powell such as http://www.pinetreeweb.com/B-P.htm might be a good idea.

A few nitpicks, though I'm sure they'll be some left for Kat to find

>"22 February 1857" ~~> 22 February, 1857
>"Professor of geometery" ~~> geometry
>"Boerv War ~~> Boers War
>"S.Africa" ~~> South Africa
>"22nd of February" ~~> 22 February
>"President of the new organistation" ~~> organisation
>"Olave became as excitied"~~> excited
>"his journies across the globe" ~~> journeys

Emmily

*poke* thats what I thought you were there for

I think the first para needs simplifying: >

Lord Robert Baden-Powell was born on the 22 February, 1857. He was the son of an Oxford Professor of geometry, was educated at Charterhouse, and saw military service in India, Afghanistan and South Africa. He achieved military distinction for his defence of Mafeking (October 1899 - May 1900) during the Boer War.
B-P, as he is affectionately known, is is of course, best known for founding the Scouting movement and, with his sister Agnes, being the co-founder of Girl Guiding.
During his service in the army, Baden-Powell conceived the idea of setting up an activities organisation for boys.

done

This sentence also needs simplifying slightly:

"He had started to gather information for a book on army Scouting, during his time in army service. When this was published, because Lord Baden-Powell was already quite famous, the book became a best seller".

>Baden-Powell had started to gather information for a book on army scouting, during his time in army service. By the time this was published, he was already a national hero, 'the hero of Mafeking', and the book became a best seller.

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I understand that the entry is about LBP -- my problem is that the entry gives the false impression that he was the one primarily responsible for getting Girl Guiding up and going, and that is very far from the case.

And if the entry is going to be primarily about LBP, then I think it really needs to focus much more on his role in Boy Scout history -- think of it this way, it was really through his role in Boy Scouts that he had an impact on Girl Guiding. Skimming over that context gives readers a very confusing impression.

ok whats say I work in the scouting give Angnes and Olave a bigger angle on guides hows that sound?

Just to add that when talking about the history of guiding in the country (England) Lord Baden-Powell gets the credit at he started the ball rolling as so to speak, Agnes and Olave are considered as carring on "that part" of the work as so to speak. Same as more credit goes to Olave's work within guiding rather than Agnes's