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Entry: Albany, Western Australia - A44669406
Author: Matt (the Hoopy), Esq. - U168592

A Scavenged Flea Market Rescue.

Hope it has hootoo qualities

The original is here: A769638

Matt

sorry Matt

Couple of things that might be worth adding:

Pronunciation - it's pronounced 'Owl-banny' not 'All-banny', as might be expected by the British reader. I don't think this is just a question of accent.

Climate - it's only a 'cold town' by Australian standards. Though I've never been rained on so much in my life.

I think it's a little unfair to say that Whaleworld glorifies whaling. From what I remember (and it's been a few years), it tells the story of whaling, but also of the move from whale-hunting to whale-watching for tourism. It makes a strong case for conservation.

From my last visit, I'd say the burning issue there was about coping with expansion rather than the collar on the dog rock! The population was growing fairly rapidly due to migration, and questions about redeveloping aspects of the sea front. However, all my knowledge on this is years out of date. Perhaps this isn't worth going into, though.

This looks good Here's some suggestions:

pick up on the ennui, one piece of scrawl
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pick up on the ennui, with one piece of scrawl

This...'ambience'...is probably on account of the first 'explorers' (read invaders), who killed anything of interest when they first arrived - including some of the local Aborigines, the Mineng Noongar people.
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This 'ambience' is probably the fault of the first 'explorers' (read 'invaders') who on arrival killed anything of interest, including some of the local Aborigines, the Mineng Noongar people.

for there own personal use (read sex slaves)
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'for their own personal use' (read 'sex slaves')


Despite all that, the port of Albany has had many visitors, from royalty through to Australian writer and poet Henry Lawson - who said something unmemorable about how Albany will never change muchWell, he was proved wrong. Whaling ended, and the city ended up having a huge supermarket built. Yippee! - and Mark Twain, however, when he came to the port he preferred to stay on board the ship.
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Despite all that the port of Albany has had many visitors, from royalty through to Australian writer and poet Henry Lawson. Lawson said something unmemorable about how Albany will never change much, but was later proved wrong – whaling ended, and the city ended up having a huge supermarket built. Yippee! Meanwhile, when Mark Twain came to the port, he perhaps sensibly decided to stay on board the ship.

Alex

Thanks all (and great to see you in PR Otto ).

I'll work on those suggestions shortly, will post back when done

Updated

Thanks all

I like the general tone very much - it seems you're giving the place a good natured drubbing that someone living there would not mind.

Should Anzacs be ANZACS? and footnoted too?

Many nicely turned phrases - 'the old gaol is a popular tourist attraction to this day. The new one isn't so much' for example

Thanks p,

I've added a footnote, just for you

I did try and keep it in the same tone as the original Entry - so I'm glad it came of as a loving drubbing, rather than the usual 'my hometown is ' kind of thing

Any more comments over this one for the weekend?

Just that it's good and it made me smile quite a few times.

Agreed - it made me shudder in a couple of places too.

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Ms GB

Kudos goes to the original author

Congratulations

Kudos to both of youse

Well done Matt and whoever started this off.