h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Oh, and one hint: replace "H2O" with "H2O" for proper chemical formula.

This looks great - and perfectly seasonal

by the way.it's quite useful if you post back here when you've made changes so we're reminded to have a re-read

Fantastic first entry!

personaly, I'd assume there would be issues with a BBC web site detailing how to make snowballs that with stones in that are only ment to injure peopel. I've known people to be sued for less

poetpaul (post 2) - "but i also think its in the wrong place. Entries like this should be In AWW to go in the Underguide"
I agree.

Sho (post 6) - "I think a snowball entry is a great idea. But this is less of a How To and more of a description of what they do" and BigAl (post 14) - "although the Entry is entitled 'CRAFTING the perfect snowball', there is little information on HOW to make them"
I agree.

Emmily (post 9) - I'm uncomfortable with Entries that condone/inform how to hurt someone, or do damage" and post 18 - "responsibility and clarification of mutual participation, instead of things like: "Throw it, at an unsuspected target" and "target is particulary hated""
I agree.

emr (post 10) - "I've been in many a snowball fight and never been actually injured"
I'm always a little perplexed when someone deduces that because a particular consequence hasn't happened to them or it hasn't happened yet, that it never will and therefore it's okay to do or to describe something else that could statistically result in the consequence that's being discussed.

Jon_m (post 23) - "personaly, I'd assume there would be issues with a BBC web site detailing how to make snowballs that with stones in that are only ment to injure peopel"
Damn straight.

This really is a long way from EG material - it's another one of those 'student humour' entries where someone just sits down to write something that reads like Douglas Adams/Terry Pratchett and countless schoolboys before either of those two authors were ever published. It's not in the least bit informative, it's simply an unfunny attempt at humour.

I honestly can't see the Editors allowing the entry to include 'The Painful' and 'The Surprise', so there's a third of it gone already. However, 'The Oort Cloud Special' is one thing about this entry that I really like - it's a very clever way to link snowballs and comets.

"A snowball. A perfect handcrafted sphere of solidified H2O"
No, that would be a lump of ice.

"generally found in temperate latitudes"
No - generally found in polar latitudes (tundra), seasonally found in temperate latitudes, occasionally found in warmer latitudes either during extremes of weather or because of altitude (Mt Kilimanjaro for eg).

"The most famous snowball creating six year old I know of"
First person references aren't meant to be in edited entries.

"This entry currently has methods for the production of five types of snowball"
No, it only purports to have instructions for four - "A large mass of ice and dirt, no-one is entirely sure how these are built" (Oort Cloud Special).

recipiant - recipient

"in the direction of it's creator" - its

standint - standing

unintereested - uninterested

Okay. Well, I think this certainly could be made EG-appropriate. Right now, I must confess, it is not. But it could be.

1. Make sure that everyone knows that snowballs must be used with caution and could potentially injure people. That also means cutting out names like 'The Painful'.

2. Devote a little more time and explanation to exactly how one creates a snowball. Go through the process in detail, and don't try to be funny if the situation doesn't really requit it. Imagine you're explaining it to someone who's from the tropics and has never seen snow before.

3. Maybe some info about using the snowballs after you've made them? I.e. throwing them, or how a snowball fight works?

In general, this could be made more factual, I suppose. Right now the humour outweighs the actual information; it's good to try to effect a balance. If you don't want to do that, then you should take the entry out of Peer Review and bring it over to Writing-Alternative. But there's no reason, if you're willing to make the effort, why this can't be made into a good EG-suitable entry.

I like it. It does what it says and doesn't drag on. Clear and to the point. Of coarse, almost all snow seems to avoid my town. So does most other interesting (relatively speaking, of coarse) weather. With us it's either too cold and wet or too hot and dry. I firmly believe that if the apocalypse began, fire rained from the sky and the Earth tore itself asunder, all my town would get is a mild shower. I'm drifting, ignore me.

Why'd you remove this from PR, Midge?

When you remove something from a review forum, if you could please post to the thread letting people know what you're doing, that'd be great.

Sorry, yes, I've removed it. I feel it's unsuitable in the current climate.

What current climate?

Either - for me it's summer, so the snowballs will melt.

Or - with all the threats of terrorism, we should attempt reconcilliation.

But we need the entry before winter comes, so we can prepare!

And with all this terrorism, what better way to relieve the tension than a friendly snowball fight?

I have never been in a friendly snowball fight.

Poor you

I've never really been in a snowball fight, they've more been individual snowballs together. If you get me.

I know what you mean. But I'm sorry to see you've removed the entry. By the time it got into the EG it would certainly be approaching snowtime. I thought it had potential, too.

Ah well, maybe you'll try again another time?

I hope you do; really enjoyed it

Sorry, it just doesn't feel right anymore.