h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Lancaster City Football Club - A4025044
Author: Egon - U148120

An entry on one of England's minor football teams.

What top Dutch side???

Oh, did I forget to include the name? It was NAC Breda, but he was kept out the team by Ernie Stewart and Archil Arveladze.

I've rejigged the footnote to include a mention of NAC.

I think, according to the correct style, your Subheader are all supposed to be Headers.

B

Good article, Egon. Well-structured and very readable .

Thanks Amy.

B, I've de-subbed all the headers- I always get confused about what the house style is for them- because surely the title is the actual header and all the rest are subsections and therefore subheaders- that's he logic I was using but I stand corrected.

Any more comments on how to improve this?

Nope. It looks just fine from where I'm sitting

I know it wasn't a tremendously useful post. I have no suggestions for improvements.

Actually, I consider posts ike yours to be helpful- the fact that people think it's as good as it can be is positive. It's just that when people point out problems it actually gives me something to do, whereas positive posts just leave me twiddling my thumbs ands waiting for it to be picked.

Well, if all you want is something to do, I'm sure I can make a few suggestions...

B

I'm just shamelessly bumping this up the PR list in order to catch the attention of anyone who may have missed it.

I like this, I think it's an interesting entry. There are a few niggles though.

it's record result -> its record result

"The stars of this period of success in the 1920s..."
This sentence doesn't make sense. I think you either want to say:
'The stars on whom this period of success were built include players such as...' or
'This period of success...was built on some of the clubs best players...'
or some variant on the above.

There are points were you use 'like', for example, the above sentence, where 'such as' would be better, IMO.

"As the town was re-christened a City, so was the club"
This isn't strictly true, the club didn't become a City. I would say something like '...re-christened a City, the club was renamed to reflect this'.

There should be a gap before the 'The Dolly Blues' header.

Also, I'm curious why the stadium is called 'Giant Axe'.

"I'm curious why the stadium is called Gaint Axe"

So am I. I have emailed one of the club's directors of my acquaintance to ask, but I don't think he's checking his email at the moment- out of season and all that- An Ask jeeves Search didn't help, I'll keep exploring avenues to find that out.

I'll fix those other points now.

Right, thanks to the club secretary Barry newsham, I now have an answer to the question of Giant Axe's name, which I will mould intot he entry in a minute.

This is what Mr NEwsham has told me:

"The name of Lancaster City's ground is quite simple in the fact that in
years gone by, the boundary wall from the sky took the form of a huge axe
head. The name Giant Axe was then derived.
The original football ground was in the middle of a huge circle of grass
(older people may refer to it as "the sixpence"). In summer four local
cricket teams used to play on it at the same time. Also around
this"sixpence" was a cinder running track.
At that time their were other facilities which included a bowling green and
two tennis courts (no longer seen).
The football ground today is now four sided."

Well I've worked out that post #17 is almost certainly Egon's.

Now I wonder what it says.

* twiddles thumbs *

indeed my post. Look.

The contents of which have been incorporated into the entry