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Serephina Started conversation Mar 13, 2008
Entry: The Willow Foundation - A27578262
Author: Serephina..in attack of the killer wheelchair - U191719
A27578262 - The Willow Foundation
Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Mar 14, 2008
A27578262 - The Willow Foundation
Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Mar 14, 2008
It seems to be very short. Perhaps it could be made longer by looking at what similar entries on charities feature.
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Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Mar 14, 2008
A few small nitpicks for now
The illness should be italicised, should it not?
<> should be Bob and Meg
<> should be fundraising
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Leo Posted Mar 24, 2008
This sound familiar. Has it been in PR before?
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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Mar 24, 2008
There's an EGWW thread attached to the Entry..
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Serephina Posted Apr 11, 2008
Sorry, I've had tons going on and not known where my own head is
I'm just waiting from an email back from Savannah who's had a special day with Willow to see what she can add then I should be able to get on with this.
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Websailor Posted Apr 15, 2008
One small nitpick that Opti missed.
Last paragraph <> should read 'occasionally'.
I remember seeing them talking about this on TV.
Websailor
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Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Apr 15, 2008
Websailor for picking up on the nitpick that was missed. You realise that anyone can pick up on nitpicks, I'm not the only one. It's a good job I'm not alone either.
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Websailor Posted Apr 15, 2008
Hi, Opti, Oh, I'm very good at nitpicking I am told but not clever enough or patient enough to do the other stuff. I just drop in when I can and if something interests me. I just wish I could see my own mistakes as easily.
Websailor
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Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Apr 15, 2008
Sometimes the only way we can see our mistakes is to take a step back do something else and then re-read it with fresh eyes. I'm not sure about being clever or patient and what other stuff? I look forward to seeing more comments. Anyway back to the entry.
I feel the first sentence could do with a comma here and there and if blockquoting you do not need to use speech marks.
A blockquote should be set out like this:
insert text here - insert who said it here
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Serephina Posted Jun 1, 2008
Think I've caught all the nitpicks, thank everyone ..please shout of you spot anymore!
I've also added a little more
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Websailor Posted Jun 1, 2008
Hi, Seraphina,
You have one of my faults - rather long sentences
<>
A full stop after 'enjoy again.' followed by .. 'These treats help as an escape from the day to day pressures they experience and gives them special memories to carry in to the future.
<<>
spelling - limousine; Oh, and a capital letter for London.
Back when I have a little more time. Nice entry and a boost for a little known charity.
Websailor
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Peer Review: A27578262 - The Willow Foundation
- 1: Serephina (Mar 13, 2008)
- 2: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups (Mar 14, 2008)
- 3: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups (Mar 14, 2008)
- 4: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups (Mar 14, 2008)
- 5: Leo (Mar 24, 2008)
- 6: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Mar 24, 2008)
- 7: Natalie (Apr 3, 2008)
- 8: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Apr 11, 2008)
- 9: Serephina (Apr 11, 2008)
- 10: Websailor (Apr 15, 2008)
- 11: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups (Apr 15, 2008)
- 12: Websailor (Apr 15, 2008)
- 13: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups (Apr 15, 2008)
- 14: Serephina (Jun 1, 2008)
- 15: Websailor (Jun 1, 2008)
- 16: Cyzaki (Jul 8, 2008)
- 17: Noth€r (Aug 30, 2008)
- 18: U168592 (Sep 18, 2008)
- 19: U168592 (Sep 18, 2008)
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