h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

I like it. I really do. It makes one feel along with you, and who has not lived it himself? I don't know if I have the authority to say this though: The style in the beginning looks to me a little different than the rest. I am not talking about better and worse, just a little different, as if you began it one day, did not finish, and started on it at a later date. But I like it. It's really good. Congratulations!

One of the things you may have noted is the use of the other four senses, in the first section of the poem: Taste, Scent, Touch, Hearing. There is one of the five senses missing from the descriptions.

The center goes merrily along with its rhyming and meter, because it dates back to the time before the world changed for the Main Character, when everything was good and right.

Then the blindness set in. I tried as best I could to hold off giving it away until the last line, only peppering the rest of the piece with hints. I believe it worked out correctly.

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Yes, it certainly 'worked out'. It is haunting, it leaves something in my mind that is very touching. May I ask a perhaps stupid question? Do you really mean you went blind, or is it as I understood it first, that your love stopped, never mind the reason...? Love, F

Farawaylady,
Sorry for taking so long a time to respond back. We've been without internet access for quite some time now, and the situation may continue if I don't get the 'home computer' resurrected. (Debacle trying to load Earthlink software that corrupted OS and killed all the USB ports.)

So, about the poem:
It was intended to show the plight of man who had been losing his sight. That malady affected his relationship with his wife, spiraling downward into a distance of touch, an emptiness of feeling, a drawing away of love. It was not always so, as displayed in the lyrical center of the piece, but the intro and outro book-end his remaining feelings of loss.

Does that adequately answer your question? I hope so. Oh, and--No--this is not autobiographical by any means.

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