h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: CS Lewis - The Great Divorce - A16172507
Author: Pilgrim4Truth - U5734655

Having spent some time in EG Writing Workshop - Hope you find the entry interesting!

I know little of your subject. For now, I'll offer only one grammatical point, the names of long poems which may be published as a book in their own right, such as Paradise Lost or The Divine Comedy, should be written in italics, not enclosed in inverted commas.

It's a good write-up. I've read some of his Chronicles of Narnia and his little book Mere Christianity, but nothing else.

TRiG.

Thanks Trig - I changed the entry accordingly.

Execpt that you've stuck Milton into italics along with Paradise Lost.

If you really want to make the subeditor's job easier, you could replace all curly apostrophes with straight ones. I'm afraid I have nothing else to say. I'm too tired to think intelligently.

TRiG.

Maybe both of us are tired! - I'll make the changes

Good entry - it's a while since I read the book itself, and you summed it up very well .

Apart from what's already been said, I can't think of anything else to add!

Thanks - I am pleased you enjoyed it.

Pilgrim,

We're enjoying your CS Lewis entries! All three are potentially Edited Guide-bound, but they need some work. First, we need you to do something. We need you talk about the books more and we need you to rely on Lewis's quotes less. More of you; less of him.

For instance, are the books works of fiction, are they allegorical? Are they polemical? Are they essays? It's not immediately apparent. We need more background information, more of your own commentary by way of helping those unfamiliar with the work of CS Lewis to get a foothold on your subject matter.

You externally link to CS Lewis quotes so there's no need for a long list of them at the end of your entries. Unless, that is, you were to take each quote and comment on them yourself in context.

This goes for your two other CS Lewis entries:

A16019318 CS Lewis - The Abolition of Man
A16019363 CS Lewis - The Problem of Pain and A Grief Observed

Good luck and good work so far.

OK I'll work on those aspects over the next few days with a goal to complete by end of the month.

Pilgrim, that's great. I actually like the quotes a lot; if you could keep some in but with commentary and with context, that would be ideal. I particularly liked this one: "There have been men before now who got so interested in proving the existence of God that they came to care nothing for God Himself...as if the good Lord had nothing to do but exist! There have been some who were so occupied in spreading Christianity that they never gave a thought to Christ. Man! Ye see it in smaller matters. Did ye never know a lover of books that with all his first editions and signed copies had lost the power to read them? Or an organiser of charities that had lost all love for the poor? It is the subtlest of all the snares."

Good luck with it all - we look forward to reading them again.

This is a great little book, and this is a good summary. The quotes at the end are perhaps in the wrong place, and I think there are too many of them anyway. You could select some of them (get rid of the rest) and insert them in the main text to illuminate the points you are making.

Whoops - I see others had already made that suggestion...

Still working on these, Pilgrim?

Yes - I was distracted for sometime by some pressing issues. I'll follow up with revisions as suggested soon.

How soon is soon?

Hi,

I'm not sure I see how the quotes from Nagel and Ayer tie in with the book; could you make this clearer? Are you taking them as representative of atheists in general? If so, does the Lewis' book comment on this view, and how?

Also, on a grammatical point: 'accustomed to the arguments of Marx and Freud.' - do you mean 'according to the arguments'? If not, I think you need a comma.

'There is that old oxymoronic' - the phrase you quote is not an oxymoron.

Gif

Oh, by the way...

otherwise, nice article!

Gif

Thanks for showing interest, I'll adress these issues shortly (really!)

How's this all going?