h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Pole Dancing - A12250982
Author: PoleKitten - U4347919

Pole dancing and pole fitness are the latest craze in the UK. Becoming increasingly popular for both men and women it is a fantastic form of fitness, increasing strength, flexibilty and confidence.

Hello PoleKitten and a very warm welcome to Peer Review!

What a great entry! (and sure to go down well with the boys around here)

Just a couple of comments on the entry style: remove the first header (the title serves as the first header) and everywhere you have used double-quotes, house-style is single quotes.

Where you have written about getting bruises you have a word in capitals (sorry, I've forgotten it and I can't go back or I'll lose this post) but it should be in bruise (for example) instead of capitals.

You can have a browse through the <./>writing-guidelines</.> if you like

Other than that, great entrywell done

Galaxy Babe
Scout

yeay, intresting entry.

I'm not an expert on the subject meself, however I have a couple of suggestions for just tiding up the spelling and grammer.


... much more mainstream, safer and acceptible to the public ---> acceptable


... more recently women have become alot more confident ---> a lot


the most common question regarding Pole Fitness ---> The most

They are deisgned to be a fun ---> designed

car rallys and other --> rallies


the only diffrence is that instead ---> difference


classes in burlsque dancing and/or striptease---> burlesque


("Mrs Henderson Presents") ---> (Mrs. Henderson Presents</I&gt

(film titles go in italics)



with these corrections and a few edits suggested by GB to get everything into house style, I can see this getting into the edited guide.

oh, and welcome to H2G2

I second that, welcome and great job!

I don't have time to look at this now, but on a very brief scan it looks good!

By the way, I'm at the University of York and we have a Pole Exercise club here; I think it's the first of it's kind.

Well I don't know anything about it either Jon, but congratulations to pole-kitten on a good first entry, with Guide ML and on an original subject.

This is indeed a very good entry, but parts of it are lifted directly from Wikipedia and http://www.pole-play.co.uk/ You'll need to re-write these parts if it is to progress further than PR.

There is also this Entry in the Edited Guide - A926345 which covers the subject briefly

Cheers! Made all those modifications. The bits extracted from www.pole-play.co.uk are in there because I wrote them! Guess I should probably modify them though. I probably lifted some from wikipedia to use on the website so I'll take a look.

Yes, I did presume that from your nickname However, for the edited guide it does need to be original work that doesn't appear anywhere else, so you will have to at least re-phrase those parts. The part that appears on Wikipedia (I think it's just the first section) will need to be changed so that it is clearly different to the source page.

Hope this helps

Is this still being worked on?

Doesn't look like it -- the author doesn't appear to have been around on h2g2 for a couple of months. Has the issue with wordage coming from Wikipedia been addressed? If so, I think it's pickable -- but if not, we should think about moving this out of Peer Review.


Mikey

I propose a move to the Flea Market

Seconded and added to Scout Database (both)