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A1082152 - Varanasi
McKay The Disorganised Posted Jun 18, 2003
Sounds etheral. However guide style is for non personal, so you should not use the personal pro-noun.
Whilst the mention of the Ganges will direct people to India, a more precise location would perhaps enable people unfamiliar with the sub-continent to determine if their itinery will allow them to visit.
You've mentioned a great deal of history is connected to the City, but don't tell us any of it, not everyone will be able to physically make the trip, built them a melange of sights, sounds and smells to so at least they can appreciate the atmosphere.
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Number Six Posted Jun 29, 2003
Erm, I hate to sound thick, but where is it? Apart from the reference to the Ganges, the entry didn't offer much of a clue.
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Comfortably Numb!! Posted Jul 18, 2003
Hi
I modified the entry a bit to take into account your views.
I hope it gives a better picture now.
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Uncle Heavy [sic] Posted Jul 19, 2003
you shouldnt use opinion at all, or the pronoun 'one'. we need more facts, and subheaders, to set it out better. also, ganja a mystica; experience does not make 
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Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide! Posted Sep 10, 2003
Hmmmm.... The author doesn't appear to have been around for quite awhile.
I agree that this is an interesting topic for an entry, but it really leaves me hanging with all sorts of basic questions unanswered. The entry seems to address more the "tone" of the area rather than more concrete issues.
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Cyzaki Posted Sep 26, 2003
The author has left the building, I think. So flea market or back to entry or where?
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Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide! Posted Sep 26, 2003
Well, I could potentially agree with either one.
It's worth moving to the FM if there is enough substance to the entry that someone could turn into something EG suitable with a little elbow grease. Frankly, I don't think this one really meets the "substance" bar. On the other hand, we sometimes send entries to the FM that are short on substance, but are intriguing enough that they might inspire someone to write an entry that wouldn't otherwise be written. I think this one might fall into that category.
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Number Six Posted Sep 26, 2003
I vote for the FM, on this one... anyone that's been there and knew the place would surely be inspired by this if they found it there.
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Peer Review: A1082152 - Varanasi
- 1: Comfortably Numb!! (Jun 17, 2003)
- 2: McKay The Disorganised (Jun 18, 2003)
- 3: Number Six (Jun 29, 2003)
- 4: Comfortably Numb!! (Jul 18, 2003)
- 5: Uncle Heavy [sic] (Jul 19, 2003)
- 6: Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide! (Sep 10, 2003)
- 7: Cyzaki (Sep 26, 2003)
- 8: Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide! (Sep 26, 2003)
- 9: Number Six (Sep 26, 2003)
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