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korfyr_jr Posted Oct 27, 2004
OOH! i want to wright songs!
i have almost no musical talent though
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lil_fred333 Posted Oct 27, 2004
I don't have a musical talent either.... but I have a talent for writing. I got published again the other day! WOOPIE!
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Oct 29, 2004
So - how should we begin?
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lil_fred333 Posted Oct 30, 2004
Erm... we could figure out what we want to write about/ sing about.
Oh! I know! .... it could be an oxi-moron/ opposite/ ironic song. Ya know... something called like... I dunno...?
"Full Emptiness"
"The usual oddness"
"Down in the sky"
"Flaming Ice cubes!"
or uh????
"Truthful lies!"
HA! ok... maybe not... but I thought those were cool. (I made them up myself!)
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 1, 2004
What about "The Sound of Silence"?
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korfyr_jr Posted Nov 2, 2004
wright lirics?
*sings in horrid voice*
SIIILLENT SOOUUNNDDSSS!!!! FALAAAALLLAA!!!*squeek* THE SILENCE OF THE SSSOOOUUNND!!!
just a thought
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 4, 2004
Maybe someone could contribute lyrics and I could try out chord patters and stuff. I'll record it and send it and see what transpires. And if you've got an instrument you could help with the music too and I could help with the lyrics?
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lil_fred333 Posted Nov 5, 2004
We could all write a drft, then edit them together.... just an idea...
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 5, 2004
Okay - I'll put in some lyrics for starters:
Whatever this darkness seems to be,
The truth is only known between you and me,
And now you're gone and I've moved on,
The sound of silence sets me free...
I dunno - I just made it up then...
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lil_fred333 Posted Nov 7, 2004
Thats really good! My mum thinks so too, I just read it to her. Although my mum just said that "the sound of silence" is already a song. It was writen by Paul Simon
here as his lyrics:
http://www.ckk.chalmers.se/guitar/sounds.of.silence.lyr.html
I don't know is you want to reword the name of the song, start over, or just say, "Oh poo, we'll just happen to have the same name!" But I really like what you've writen so far, i just don't know if you knew about the title. I didn't before.
We could call it "silent sounds"... and keep the lyrics you've writen. The sound of silence can still be in the song. Does it really matter?
Any way... continuing on your lyrics...
And as I bid the memories goodbye,
I hold back the tears, and try not to cry.
I shut the door, and ask nothing more.
The sound of silence tells me why.
er... there? I don't know if that's exactly what you were going for... but I tried. Please feel free to tell me if you don't like it or if thats not the direction you were hoping to take the song. In other words. I don't care if you think it's crap, just tell me.
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 7, 2004
Damn (sorry) - I didn't know about that Paul Simon song! I guess "The Sound of Silence" was just too "lyrical" to have not been taken already.
I like your verse - it's awesome!
Here's another:
Here I am, months down the track,
Vanished fate, slipped through a crack,
I can't move on - now that you're gone
The sound of silence holds me back.
Okay - that sucked. Admit it.
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 7, 2004
Of course it did - I just saw the part where I said "Now that you're gone and I've moved on" in my orignial verse, and now I'm saying "I cant move on now that you're gone"... oh crap!
Can you fix it for me?
I really need some new rhymes, don't I?
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lil_fred333 Posted Nov 8, 2004
Actually I like it. The first time it says that you do move on, but then later it admits that you can't. It's kind of like at first you thought it would be a good thing with out them around, but then you relise that you need them.
But, if you still thinks it sucks, we can put in a chorus there to seporate the transition (from moving on and then not) we could have it use the "silent sounds" thing in the chorus, so we don't have to change the reat of the stuff. That might make it better. If you don't get what I mean heres an example:
Silent sounds
from deep with-in
Call my name
as the tears begin.
silent sounds,
let me rest in peace!
Far away
from crule reality.
I don't know... it's just an example, you can go for somthing different if you like. Feel free to edit it.
PS: for my 1st verse that I wrote... do you think instead of "bid my memories goodby", it should be "bid my dreams goodby" ? Which sound better to you?
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 9, 2004
I think "dreams" might be a better substitute - dreams seem a less solid thing than memories, and often are much better than real life. Therefore it would be harder to let them go.
I think the chorus as a separator between the verses is a good idea. Pehaps it should be 2 verses, then the chorus, then 2 verses.
Silent sounds from deep within
Call my name as the tears begin.
Sleeping shadows, spare my soul
In my heart a gaping hole.
Silent sounds - please take your leave
I need space to live and breathe
Steal my hopes and fly away
My life begins anew today.
Feel free to edit what you like...
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lil_fred333 Posted Nov 9, 2004
So this is what we've got so far then...
Silent Sounds
Whatever this darkness seems to be,
The truth is only known between you and me,
And now you're gone and I've moved on,
The sound of silence sets me free...
And as I bid the dreams goodbye,
I hold back the tears, and try not to cry.
I shut the door, and ask nothing more.
The sound of silence tells me why…
Silent sounds from deep within
Call my name as the tears begin.
Sleeping shadows, spare my soul
In my heart a gaping hole.
Silent sounds - please take your leave
I need space to live and breathe
Steal my hopes and fly away
My life begins anew today.
Here I am, months down the track,
Vanished fate, slipped through a crack,
I can't move on - now that you're gone
The sound of silence holds me back…
now we need some more verses and i'm can't think of any.
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Midnight Ice - the Daughter of a Cacophony of Chrysanthemums Posted Nov 9, 2004
I started last night trying to think of a tune or a melody or something to accompany it. So far I have a vague and shadowy idea of what it might be, but nothing definite.
What direction should the song go in now? And what should the overall theme be? I think we've established that, but it might be good to define it. I don't know, I've never done anything like this before.
Maybe think about the themes of the song and write a verse or two based around different aspects of it.
I think "begins anew today" is correct, but you might be better off asking someone who knows about that sort of thing. Like an English teacher or something...?
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