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sycloboy Started conversation Dec 3, 2010
Entry: The Watcher - A77874420
Author: sycloboy - U14708839
O.K, who hasn't caught themselves taking a peek in the mirror as they went past?
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cactuscafe Posted Dec 3, 2010
Good heavens! You are poetic! This sounds great read aloud!
ah yes! Great lines for performance! Do you read your poems aloud after you have written them?
cactuscafe 
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Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Dec 3, 2010
I like this one. 
Using a second-person approach brings out the 'watcher' idea very well.
Personally, I avoid mirrors as much as possible, but the thoughts are nonetheless intriguing.
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minorvogonpoet Posted Dec 4, 2010
I like this, particularly the lines
"Dance before this
Surface circus of shadow and light."
Though I wasn't sure about
"Manufactured brawn".
In answer to cactuscafe's question always, always read poems out aloud.
Horrid things, mirrors. When I see myself, I usually think 'Am I really that old, that fat'? 
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sycloboy Posted Dec 17, 2010
Thank you for your comments Um to answer your question, yes I tend to read them out loud as I write them and as I compose them. Bike and car journeys are great for this, as no-one can hear you!
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Magwitch - My name is Mags and I am funky. Posted Dec 17, 2010
Crivvens I missed this...
I've now read it several times.
Excellent work.
As said, best read aloud.
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