h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

I swear all I wanted to do was submit a poem!!! Please don't exclude me from future goings-on! I must admit I didn't read directions. Here's my poem, submitted correctly:

springborne-for mitzi

winter hauls herself away
her sterile skirts like glaciers
gathered up, retreating

we're born in green and sleep here
as the in–between that freezes
keeps the ends from meeting

the sun buried boils the soil
of incandescent hills
hiding there sought solar solace, steaming streams to clouds

roused from hibernation
grows the rows for new beginnings
March to regeneration

spring sits king–like on his throne
crowned in sun and gowned in amber
'til the end of the world

our gift to you
is your gift to us
returned

c clay a

No problem. Looks good I'll get back to you soon, with a proper appreciation.

Hullabaloo

i appreciate your pending appreciation.

Hi c clay a,

This is absolutely marvelous. You're obviously very aware of language - this poem is almost as much about its own words as it is about its subject-matter; a sharp awareness of language being a pre-requisite for good poetry . This is shown in the many effective internal rhymes: green-sleep, retreating-meeting-between, spring-king, gowned-crowned. These are all the better for not being in predictable places, thus engaging the reader and keeping the interest very much alive. This facility with rhyme and language makes for a strong dynamic, bringing the reader forward through the poem very effectively. The reader feels actively involved in the realisation of the poem. Your images too are very striking - the glacier skirts of winter, the king of spring crowned in sun. The structure is also strong, which helps the reader to feel they can trust the poem as they move through it - that the investment of attention will be rewarded. I enjoyed this poem very much, and found it highly rewarding.

Hullabaloo

wow. i am aglow. thank you so much for your kind words. i am, above all, a lover of language, and i am glad that it shows through my work. i must also say that i found your comments concise, thoughtful and intelligent. thank you again.

Hull