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Entry: The Compact: An Anti-Consumerism Movement - A24712238
Author: Leo - U519437


Answering my own challenge on the subject, because PR is looking dry and I only have a dozen more important things to do.

A great entry, which I read with great interest .

One tiny thing: 'Yahoo' isn't capitalised in the first paragraph of 'The Reaction'.

Now it is.

Good work! Just one thing - curly apostrophes. Get some nice, brand new straight apostrophes instead

Very nicely done.

Perhaps the ending could use a little tinkering. After such a good entry, it just kind of sputters.

>>The Compact is unique in its breadth and growth. How long it will last and how large it will grow is anybody's guess.<<

It does seem unique, but not in breadth and growth - it occurs to me that amway, the anti-compact, is probably similar in breadth and growth. and the last sentence could be said about anything. I don't have something to suggest really - but maybe you could find a used quote somewhere.

(this is just as good on the second reading )

Interesting & thought provoking.

Three things - well, two & a Q

1. Section The Motto - For me, 'the Gap' needs explanation.

2. Section The Spiritual Inspiration - Black Friday, well, it does come out later, but... Black Friday can mean other things in other places.

3. Section The Reaction, last para - leeching. Should that be leaching?

Thanks - I'm ruminating. Will get around to some action come Monday and w*rk.

OK, fixed fixed and fixed.

By leeching I mean, like a leech.

That seems a better ending

Not the result of ruminating, though. Purely 100% post-deadline inspiration.

Anyone else? New criticism, fresh out of the factory (Bangledashian preferred), currently accepted.

Nope - I think this is more or less ready, unless anyone has anything else to point out

Well, excepting the fact that it would become a new entry for the Guide, I guess I wouldn't object too much if it were picked. If it recycled the old A-number instead of wastefully moving to another, it would be better , of course.

Although I've heard of the movement, I'd not heard the title 'Compact', and I must confess I thought it was about womens beauty products. I got the gist very quickly though.

"Craigslist originally started..."
Should this be Craigslist,com or .org or something else? Perhaps make this a direct link to the site?

"A user posts something up for grabs and its location and every and all are free to beg for it. "
Although this sentence works, there seems to be a lot of 'ands'.

"Never forget garage sales and flea markets, excellent sources for super-cheap used goods."
Again, this sentence isn't bad, but I think there's got to be a punctuation mark better than the comma. Maybe a hyphen?

The Church of Stop Shopping is great. In fact, I'd like to know all ten commandments. This is personal though, and it'd probably interrupt the flow of the article.

I enjoyed reading through this muchly. It's a notion that I subscribe to when the opportunity presents itself (although I'm not a freegan).

I'll get to your points. Thanks.
I have the 10 Commandments somewhere - I was doing an article on Black Friday and pocketed a flyer for future reference. Let me see if I can dig around and find it and see if there's anything else of note on it.

Is this ready to go?

Excellent question.



OK, now it is. I don't see myself having much time now to dig up the 10 commandments, and anyway, Vip's right - it would interrupt. I can always post them on the bottom of the entry if they turn out to be side-splitting.

Or even a separate mini-entry. It doesn't have to be edited, does it?

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