h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: The Pilgrimage - A Short Story - A9901190
Author: h5ringer - U3386111

Normally I write factual stuff, but this piece I felt a compulsive need to write. Why I don't know, as this is my first venture into writing fiction

If a few people like it, that's a bonus

Enjoy

good to see you here, welcome to the AWW.

This is a classy piece of writing, and for a first go at fiction... perhaps it's not such a first though, in that the feeling for Herr M in this is not fiction? There's a very strong feeling of that being true in this and that, most of all, is what makes it work. The idea's good, interesting, the wording and the style also. But this is told with real feeling and that gives it that extra.

I particularly liked the 'accompaniment of a different rhythm' bit at the start. You've got to be engaged by a character that walks like that .

Thanks for posting it here.
Waz

Seriously good writing, this.
Not what I'd call fiction, though. It's fact told with style and latitude.

I'm biased, but I'd say that the best writing in h2g2 is in this genre. There's a small and select group who admire it, some of whom try their own.

One day, this kind of writing will be the backbone of a re-thought Edited Guide.

Don't worry; you don't have to be an overt revolutionary, or even believe in that particular cause. ou just knocked another brick out of the wall, though, deliberately or not. Well done for that, keep it coming, and see you around.

Pin

This is good. I think a sensitive editor would improve it. Some of the sentences run on; the punctuation could be simplified, and there are little redundancies in the writing that could be removed to give a smoother read.

Nice to read something of substance, written with emotional depth.

N

Very enjoyable. Interesting and extremely believable.

Thanks

Well done!

I enjoyed this as well, thank you

I liked this. It is intriguing, drawing the reader into the story and keeping us involved. It effectively creates a character and establishes a sense of place.

Hi h5ringer - posting to let you know that this piece has been selected as an <./>underguide</.> entry and to offer you congratulatory .

An UnderGuide Gem Polisher will be in touch for any final revisions or tweakings you might want, or they might suggest and you agree to, before they create a UG copy of the entry to be featured on h2g2's Front Page one week.

Congrats again, thank you for contributing here, it's an excellent piece, (complements your EG entries too) .
UGeds

Just to say that if all goes to plan, this should be the new UG entry for next week, and should be on the front page this Friday .

Well done and congratulations h5ringer