h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: NetHack - A2125829
Author: Ekaterin - U239615

Here, finally, is my expanded version of Bagpuss's article on Nethack.
Ekaterin.

You should say "Roguelike computer games" rather than "roguelikes" in the first sentence. This is supposed to introduce the entry for someone who has no idea what NetHack is.

Fixed. (Wow, that was very quick feedback. )

I was never too keen on my bit describing stuff that happens (the knight with Excalibur and that). If you like it, keep it, but it might be better replaced with a couple of short examples, instead of a long story.

Wasn't it release 3.4.0 that incorporated a bunch of stuff from SLASH'EM? That might be worth mentioning. Or just say that new editions of NetHack will often include stuff from a variant.

Now that it's up to someone else to implement them, I've got loads of suggestions, haven't I?

I've modified the section with examples of what happens, though I left Excalibur in there, because it makes a certain mythological sense that is typical of Nethack, and the info about it being just for lawfuls displays the Dev Team's attention to detail.

I think it was 3.3.0 that incorporated riding, monks and so forth for the first time. Also, I thought detailed discussion of which version had what features was too technical, so I included some examples of features developed in SLASH'EM instead.
Ekaterin.

Nitpick: Internet is a proper noun, so it should be capitalized in the first sentence.

Interesting entry!

Cheers!

That looks pretty good. The bit about stuff appearing first in variants and then in NetHack itself is almost exactly what I had in mind, although yours is probably more coherent. If you mention Sokoban it's probably a good idea to briefly explain what it is

Are you still working on this, Ekaterin?

Yes, I'm still here. I'll make the changes you suggested to my other articles as soon as I can. (I'm having a little trouble accessing h2g2 right now - sometimes when I click on a link it says "The RPC server is too busy to complete this operation.)

for paying some attention to my articles!
Ekaterin.

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Woo Hoo!

That's two of the roguelike entries in the Guide!

Congratulations, Ekaterin!


Geggs

Not only two Ekaterin

Pimms

All of them are in. Basically the project made it.

Hi Bagpuss and Ekaterin,
I am editing you two Rouelike game entries - Nethack - the computer game, and SLASH'EM - the computer game. Can you look at the updated versions and get back to me here or on my PS about what you think.
They both look pretty good to me - I only had to take out a footnote in the SLASH'EM entry and put the tags in the last paragraph of the Nethack entry. I hope you like what you see.
Annie

That was very quick . A couple of observations on the updated NetHack entry. I think that the term "DevTeam" needs defining, although not in a footnote. Just say "development team (DevTeam)" in the second sentence, and that will make it clear. (And if you're going to put a capital D on Development, please put a capital T on Team too, but I like it better with small letters on both.)

Also, a typo seems to have crept into the paragraph on praying and sacrificing - "onthe verge of death" needs a space between "on" and "the".

I didn't notice any changes to the SLASH'EM entry, so no comments there.

for editing my articles.
Ekaterin.

I have been lucky - I have had 4 entries so far and all four were pretty much perfect!
I have played Nethack so I knew what it is and what you were talking about.
I will fix up the typo and the Dev Team definition.
Annie

Oooh, the Nethack and SLASH'EM entries went from "accepted but not sent to sub-editor yet" to "pending" in one day - that's really impressive! At this rate I'll soon make it all the way into the Edited Guide.