A Conversation for Jade Goody - Media Queen

Peer Review: A47644617 - Jade Goody - Media Queen

Post 1

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Entry: Jade Goody - Media Queen - A47644617
Author: Galaxy Babe aka Ms GB A47534448 - U128652

S-t-r-e-t-c-h-e-d GB


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Post 2

McKay The Disorganised

Hi Babe;

Is it worth mentioning that Beauty shop she set up (Uglies ?) that they did a program about ?

On smears they also try to limit how often you can go - my wife was recommended by a specialist to have one every 12 months - and every time they say "At your age we only recommend a smear every 2 years."

smiley - cider


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Post 3

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Hi McKay smiley - smiley
I wrote this and submitted it as an example for the next Stretcher challenge: A47534448

I deliberately skimmed Jade's career or I'd have been here all nightsmiley - yawn as it was this took me 3 hours to put together in the required format. Smear test entry here: A14611420

I will write a proper entry on cervical cancer later, it's on my listsmiley - ok

GB
smiley - galaxy


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Post 4

McKay The Disorganised

I know that Babe - it's a good job her husband's called Jeff. smiley - winkeye

But once it's in PR I think I've gotta treat it like any other entry.

smiley - cider


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Post 5

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - ok


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Post 6

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

There you go McKay, I've added another section (para 2) just for you smiley - smiley


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Post 7

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Another updatesmiley - biro


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Post 8

Gnomon - time to move on

infamousy --> infamy


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Post 9

h5ringer

That has now improved it immensely smiley - ok


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Post 10

Gnomon - time to move on

Jade was told that she may have cervical cancer ... this should be "might have". The diagnosis was uncertain at the time, but she knows now.


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Post 11

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Thank you very muchsmiley - ok updatedsmiley - biro


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Post 12

McKay The Disorganised

I think it's a lot better now Babe .smiley - ok

smiley - cider


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Post 13

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - cheers
I'll update again after the weekend weddingsmiley - ok


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Post 14

Mina

I was so astonished by the tone of this entry I nearly hit the complaints button. The house rules still say 'otherwise objectionable' and I'm sorry, but I find this entry objectionable!

There are a lot of comments about 'ignorant' and 'talentless' even 'businesswoman' is given inverted comments as if she is not. The overall tone of the whole entry is dismissive and abusive as if she is giving herself airs abover her station and I don't think h2g2 and the BBC should be hosting entries like this about anyone, let alone a dying women. Regardless of personal feelings about this woman (and the entry reads as if the Researcher's opinion of Jade Goody is very low).

There is also the question of calling her parents 'drug users'. Is there proof of this considering one parent left at such an early age?There are remarks made about lack of schooling in a very derogatory way, as is 'now entitled' to call herself an author, as if she is too appalling to be an author but that's what she calls herself, also 'career' is in inverted commas. Why is that? Is it laughable that she might have a career?

The heading 'Something Gross' is simply speculation on the Researcher's part and certainly has no place in a factual Guide.

If this was written as something to do with The Post then I hope they have the common sense to remove it.


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Post 15

Gnomon - time to move on

Good points, Mina.


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Post 16

me[Andy]g

A lot of what is said in this entry may be true in terms of facts, but I don't think it's balanced enough to pass through PR. In fact, shouldn't it really be submitted somewhere else?

If it is to be made suitable for the edited guide, perhaps a good start would be to remove all the quote marks around words such as businesswoman and career, and taking out at least some if not all of the unnecessary qualifying adjectives such as the "unexpected" in the final section, or the perplexing/talentless in the opening paragraph. [Is she really perplexing anyway? Isn't the perplexing thing (for some people, at least) that the general public are that interested in her?]

I realise from reading the instructions for the Stretcher stuff that this follows those guidelines; I just don't understand why you've submitted it here. Wouldn't the AWW be more suitable, or have I misunderstood what that's for too? I've never seen an entry particularly like this in the edited guide.


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Post 17

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Thank you for your comments smiley - smiley

Updatedsmiley - biro


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Post 18

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

For me[Andy]g
<< I've never seen an entry particularly like this in the edited guide. >>
A29638920


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Post 19

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Boredom Busters: <>

I've emailed the other Judges for their response to your wish about the removal of The Stretcher competitionsmiley - biro


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Post 20

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Just to clarify: this entry is not part of The Post's Stretcher competition. I am a Judge, not a contestant. I submitted this piece to show what could be done with the instructions this time: each sentence ends with a word containing a double letter.

While this is in PR it is subject to the usual rules, and if it is offensive then that is what the moderation system is for. If it is deemed unsuitable for PR by my peers then it will be removed.

GB
smiley - galaxy


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