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Peer Review: A1046422 - Neopets

Post 1

Cyzaki

Entry: Neopets - A1046422
Author: Cyzaki - U223973

This is an article I wrote in a couple of hours this morning - what do you all think?


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Post 2

J

Uggh, I hate that site now, though I remember it in great detail...

I think that this entry would do well to add some links and descriptions of games. And guilds, Ooh, you forgot the all important guild.

smiley - blacksheep


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Post 3

Cyzaki

Okay, will add something on the guilds. what sort of explanation of the games? i can't mention them all, there's hundreds!


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Post 4

J

Some of the most popular ones, the only one I liked was bumper cars...

smiley - blacksheep


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Post 5

Cyzaki

Thing is, everyone likes different games, and if I highlight just a few then people won't get a true idea of the variety on the site. I think I've said enough about the games, and if people want to know more they can go on the site.


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Post 6

Azara

Hi, Cyzacki!

This looks like a very clear and readable guide to the whole phenomenon. There are a few things you might write a little bit about:

The commercial background - if using the Neopets site is free, how does the company make its money? Is there a lot of commercial merchandise available in shops?

The age range being aimed at - even if it still appeals to college students smiley - winkeye, I assume it's basically aimed at kids. So if parents are checking up, a reassurance that this site is a very safe place for pre-teens would be helpful.

And finally, do you have to put one of those 'Neopets is a trademark of the Neopets Corporation' warnings in the entry?

smiley - cheers
Azara
smiley - rose


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Post 7

J

The most popular. As I recall, neopets keeps a working listing of the how many people played it that day. smiley - smiley

smiley - blacksheep


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Post 8

Cyzaki

Thanks for the ideas, I'll put those in.

Don't know about the trademark thing - how would I find out about that?


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Post 9

Pimms

Hi Cyzaki smiley - smiley
Good Entry smiley - biggrin. I haven't tried the links yet, but I think you've given a good idea of what to expect. Not that I have time to adopt a neopet myself - as you suggest h2g2 can take up quite enough time.

Is this a spin-off of Pokemon? Maybe saying how it differs from the Pokemon idea, would be worthwhile?

trademark?: Maybe a google search on copyright and neopet might turn up something.

typo: In the last paragraph by > buy, in 'buy items to help your pet'

Pimms smiley - stoutsmiley - winkeye


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Post 10

Cyzaki

Thanks for the feedback.

I really don't think Pokemon needs mentioning as I don't think it really has anything to do with it - I've played both and this is the first time I've ever contemplated a link between them.

I'll have a look for the trademark/copywrite thing.


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Post 11

Azara

Hi again!

I like the new bits in the introduction - that kind of infromation on suitability was exactly what I was thinking of.

Googling on Neopet Legal Team, or Neopet trademark, turns up all kinds of fascinating 'cease and desist' warnings. But they all seem to be directed at people who were selling copycat merchandise, or asking for PayPal payments, or giving cheat codes. So I don't think there would be any problem with this entry.

You might check with Anna or Sam or Ashley when they're back in the office, just in case.

smiley - cheers
Azara
smiley - rose


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Post 12

Cyzaki

Would the trademark/copywrite thing get put in by the editors anyway? Or is it something I need to sort out before it goes to the editors?


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Post 13

Pimms

As someone who has wide-ranging ignorance of many things (having 'played' neither) I'd say that your description of Neopets struck me at least, as being very similar to what little I know about Pokemon (ie children training cute cartoon pets to compete against each other).

I don't think I would be alone in making this apparently erroneous connection, so I would argue there is a value in at least mentioning why there is no real link between them.

Pimms smiley - stout


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Post 14

Cyzaki

Any ideas on how i can put it then?


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Post 15

Pimms

Cyzaki
Possibly you could provide a link to one (or both) of the Edited entries on Pokemon in a final section on Links to other sites, with your own caveat that 'although apparently similar on the surface, Neopets provides a wholely different experience from Pokemon'

A264863 Pokemon - the Original GameBoy Game
A821675 Bluffing Your Way in Pokemon

Do you think that covers it?

Pimms smiley - stiffdrink


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Post 16

Cyzaki

Okay, I've compromised and added it as a footnote - is it okay now do you think?


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Post 17

Pimms

Yes I think that was all it needed

Good Entrysmiley - biggrin

Pimms smiley - stout (inconsistent drinker)


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Post 18

Cyzaki

Thankyou :D

I've added a footnote about the trademark thing, and moved the footnotes around a bit.

Any more comments?


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Post 19

Cyzaki

Thankyou :D

I've added a footnote about the trademark thing, and moved the footnotes around a bit.

Any more comments?


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Post 20

Cyzaki

Oops! Didn't mean to send that twice! And the :D was supposed to be smiley - biggrin


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