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Entry: 'Pathfinders' - the Science-Fiction Television Series - A87936583
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

An entry about Doctor Who's Daddy

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Interestingly, the title says less than what the Entry is about (unlike my Emmy Noether Entry where the title said more than what the Entry is about, as you rightly pointed out).

I could change it to 'Pathfinders' - the Pioneering Science-Fiction Television Series if you'd like?

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Interesting Entry. I agree about the title.

Okay, I've changed the title to include 'Pioneering' as the contextual stuff essentially describes what makes this television series pioneering.

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Yes, that title is better - the first paragraph is strengthened as a result and now I'm reading the Entry again I think I'm understanding it better but I still have questions...

Is the ITV section aiming to define what ABC is? Perhaps the definition can be briefly incorporated into the Getting Into Orbit section - you've got the link to the ITV Entry, so you don't need to go into too much information about that

"The programme proved so successful that a second series was commissioned. This was again written by Malcolm Hulke and Eric Paice, inspired by HG Wells' The First Men in the Moon (1901)" - I read this as saying Target Luna Series 2 was written and broadcast, but then the next section suggests that actually Target Luna Series 2 was Pathfinders Series 1, is that right?

How do the children get on to the unmanned ship? Sounds like MR1 and MR2 were en route to the Moon when the autopilot on MR2 failed, but I'm guessing MR2 was still on Earth when the problem was discovered, is that right?

"the MR4 rocket, changing it from its landing on the moon to travelling to Mars, where Brown believes he will [get] the fuel and water vitally needed for the crew to return to Earth." - is MR4 en route to the Moon, or already on the Moon, and why does he need to travel further to get the fuel and water needed to travel home?

"Michael Craze would play companion Ben (1966-1967) in 40 episodes " - of Doctor Who?

I've made changes to clarify:
The second series of 'Target Luna' was actually the first series of 'Pathfinders'.
The MR2 was still on when the problem was discovered.
The MR4 was going to and Brown hijacked it to go to . It hadn't been intended to go that far which is why they run out of water and fuel.
And the 'ITV' section has gone.

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"the 'ITV' section has gone." - Not gone, just hiding Here's how my thought processes go:

"The BBC's television monopoly came to an end following the 1954 Television Act" - this sentence doesn't make sense in the context of the Entry, because you haven't mentioned the BBC's monopoly before. No need to mention it now, either, because we have to draw the line somewhere - you haven't gone into detail about the invention of the television, for example.

How about replacing that paragraph with something like: "ABC2 was a franchise of ITV that began broadcasting in 1956 to the Midlands and Northern regions at weekends."?

If by 'hiding' you mean 'section reduced from a paragraph or so to two sentences that are "hiding" in plain sight in the same font size as the rest of the entry', then yep – they're hiding. The whole entry is hiding! Let's play 'Pathfinders hide and seek'

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