h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Giant Expedition Bicycle 2001 Model - A741890
Author: The Fish - According to Science; Humans are 95% Monkey........... Also according to Science; Humans are 53% Cabbage!!! - U43536

What do you think?

Interesting. What do you intend to do with this entry? Are you preparing it for Peer Review, or do you just want to keep it for your own uses?

If it's for Peer Review, you'll have to take out all references to yourself from the entry.

In either case, it will need the spelling tidied up a bit. You should also check your sentences. Read out each sentence and stop at the end of the sentence. Did it make complete sense? If not, you probably have an incomplete sentence. For example:

"The suspension setup is such that unlike most full suspension bicycles, which have a tendency of "resonating" due to both mass of the rider, and forces exerted on the pedals while pedaling."

I think you could simplify the resonating calculations:

the cyclist pedals at 90 revolutions per minute, which is 1.5 revs per second. Since each revolution involves a left and a right, the suspension is pushed 3 times per second. If the bicycle naturally resonates at 3 per second, then the cyclist ends up bobbing like a kangaroo...

No need for a footnote in that.

Thankyou Gnomon very helpful...

...I guess all this must make sense if your not dyslexic...

I guess eventually it's for Review, I just wasn't sure what needed tiding up... and also a second opinion...
Thanks

That any better

That looks a lot better! Yes, I think this would go down well in Peer Review. There are still a few typos and incomplete sentences. If you haven't found them by then, I'll give it a grilling in Peer Review!


Best of luck!

I "think" I've got all the typos now..... and I "think" it makes sense... can't quite tell though....

Thanks for taking the time Gnomon

If it's done, how do I submit it for review???

First, withdraw it from the Writing Workshop: go to the Writing Workshop contents page and click on the word Remove beside your entry.

Then submit it Peer Review. You should see a Submit For Review button on the entry itself. Click this, select Peer Review and hit the Submit/Confirm button.

First, withdraw it from the Writing Workshop: go to the Writing Workshop contents page and click on the word Remove beside your entry.

Then submit it Peer Review. You should see a Submit For Review button on the entry itself. Click this, select Peer Review and hit the Submit/Confirm button.

Thanks Gnomon! Your a