h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Perfect Dark - A733303
Author: Kilo - U192830

This is my first, please be gentle

Hi Kilo
Obviously a game you've some extensive first hand experience of then
Can't say I've ever heard of it myself so I can't comment much on the content of what you've written. However, style is everything here and you definitely need some paragraphs! That will make things a lot more readable and easy on the eye. You might want to think up a few section headers as well. Maybe 'Plot', 'Multiplayer' and so on.
Generally not a bad start at all, but does need a bit of work on the format.

MC

A fine entry on a very popular game (not that, as an ex-Sony employee I ever played it, you understand

Just a couple of things. Yes, it would be MUCH better with a few paragraphs slotted in, and maybe you might consider trying a little GuideML. It's honestly not that difficult - most people can pick it up in an evening or so, and there are GuideML tutorials in the Help! section.

- 'Goldeneye and produced by Rare' - maybe a little note about what Goldeneye is?

- I'd suggest starting your second para with 'the Perfect Dark chronicled the adventures ...' and ending with '...new threats to world security that may come along.' third para starts 'Over all,' to its conclusion.

- There are a few computer game-related entries. Maybe one of those will be suitable to link to as well.

Good first effort. Keep it up!

Jims

u wouldnt happen to know any cheats would u.I carnt remember if u put that 2player is possible in the actual main game levels, just thought it might b worth a mention

Also-

wasnt = wasn’t or was not
computerized = computerised
differnt = different
infinte = infinite
customization = customisation
customize = customise

I dont knwo thwe guide ml yet, but i will revise once I learn it. I was just trying to get a first entry in. I have had rather extensive experince wiht it, and become somewehat of an expert, but i still cant get past that many levels on the middling difficulty.

You might wish to make known who and what elvis is, the alien, I mean.

A fine start, Kilo! A bit of formatting and a little longer rattling around in here and it'll be ready to go! A note about -ize (and -ized and -ization): these are correct US spellings, but the Edited Guide always uses UK spellings to keep things consistant.

-Spike A.

ah, well then. i will have to remember that. of course, with any luck, ill be using correct uk spellings all the time soon

I hope so

A few paragraph breaks would definitely enhance readability!

*in GR mode*

Absentee author, but a nice topic - move to the FM?

I agree this should go to the flea market. I'll suggest that on the scouts message board.