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Alternative Writing Workshop: A705043 - The two spies sketch 1

Post 1

LL Waz

Entry: The two spies sketch 1 - A705043
Author: Da Unk - U188147

Does this appeal generally, or is it just me?

I'm sure there's a really serious political situation encoded here ...

Some Americam idiom in 'A's' lines would be smiley - cool.


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Post 2

U1250369

No, it's not just you.............me as well

Clever stuff Da Unksmiley - smiley


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Post 3

cupati

...that rules!


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Post 4

nadia

That is cleverly done and witty. I'm glad you put it here.

N


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Post 5

LL Waz

nadia, it's really, really good to see you here again smiley - smileysmiley - smileysmiley - smiley.

Glad you liked this one.

I thought it would add to it for the American's lines to sound American in some way, but I'm completely stuck on how it might be done. I'm no good with accents. Any ideas any of you guys? Anyone? It's been bugging me since I read it.
Waz


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Post 6

nadia

smiley - blush I'm only here while in work, still no access at home. But at least I'm back in work now!

I agree that some Americanisation for the American would improve it. And I would suggest that if it were to be done Hyp would be the lady for the job. She manages accent well in her stuff - she really gives the flavour of a speech pattern without overegging it.

We've edited stuff from elvises before so I don't see that the technical side would be a big problem, as long as the (non)sense isn't changed.

N


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Post 7

Pinniped


Hey Ladies...

This is really good, isn't it? Well dug, Waz.

The crit about American authenticity is valid, though the inside ear compensated on my first reading. One of those critical spoilers, then, unfortunately.

It's funny, well paced and well rounded, and a very nice idea that's generally realised. You'll work hard to find too many more rewarding reads.

(Stay around, nadia, OK? You've been missed at many levels)

Pinsmiley - smiley


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Post 8

DB Cooper

smiley - book


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Post 9

nadia

I'll be here as much as work allows. smiley - biggrin


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Post 10

UnderGuide Editors


Another May <./>underguide</.> selection.

Da Unc, you were only here briefly, and not since 2002, but in case you check back there's smiley - bubbly on ice here. Congratulations wherever you are smiley - smiley.

An UnderGuide Gem Polisher will post to you, just in case you return, before making final revisions and tweakings and creating a UG copy of the entry to be featured on h2g2's Front Page.

Congrats again, witty, attention-keeping nonsense is difficult to do but this does it. Thank you, in absence, for the entertainment smiley - smiley.


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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

Shouldnt a gem polisher have got to this by now


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Post 12

cupati

Who are we to wonder?

smiley - tardis


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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

im not sure *gets urge to become gem polisher*


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Post 14

LL Waz

No worries, the 'two spies sketch 1' was polished a while ago and will be on the front page in a couple of weeks.

Not many polishers do their polishing in the AWW. Actually, hardly any do.




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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

* actually bothers to apply for gem polisher*


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