h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

My first article, would appreciate an opinion on whether it is Guide material yet! http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A605477

mwuhaha I will keep replying until i get blisters or think of something even more painful

The entry as it stands seems a little more like an infomercial than a review. How about including some more facts and toning down the effusiveness a bit?

For example, the entry doesn't say when the company was founded, why, by whom, where the first one opened, etc.

Another nice thing would be an explanation of those coloured dots they put on all the items. I haven't eaten there in a while so they may have changed the system, but I got the impression they indicated when they were made/sell by date or something along those lines. I'd like to know which colour I should go for next time I eat there so that I get the freshest sandwich

oh alright then if you want me to write when I'm not drunk I'll make it a bit more factual

Incidentally the colours of the dots aren't to do with the date...to find out more read the new article :p

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'The Writing Workshop' to 'Pret A Manger'. Hi folks, This thread has been moved back to the Entry, as it has been rescued from the Writing Workshop. :-) The new PR thread is http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/F48874?thread=136768.