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Fascinating pseudo-Feminist research paper... another high distinction. Do you agree?

I will be adding the referenced websites in the near future...

Very good essay - you display an almost intimate knowledge of your subject. I'm assuming this is one of your college papers - I think you'll probably get an A+! The only thing I would recommend is to group your ideas a little closer together, and put headers as you go through your outline.

Maybe:
History - where she came from, what she did, what happened to her
Mystery - Her success, the military knowledge and leadership abilities she displayed, the acquisition of armour, etc.
Impact - Upon the people, the religious community, modern thinking.

Also - either you have a typo in your essay, or you're using one of them 50¢ words... "...fought against their vascals..." I thought at first this should be "vassals," but then looked at the context and reconsidered.

Hey, read my entry and put your two cents in (or is it two quid in Australia?) I'm looking to tighten it up and make it a little more readable.
http://www.h2g2.com/A411599

I think that'll work - if it doesn't, go to my space and head for the bottom.... Fort Worth, The Town of The Cow

- Lentilla

Thanks for the advice... when I get a chance I'll look at rearranging it.


Yours looks quite interesting, but I don't have time to critique it right now... maybe tomorrow.

Have you had a chance to critique it yet?

Wow, I just realised how rude I've been... I guess I should start doing things when I say I will :P Because I still haven't changed my entry, and I only just looked in depth at yours...

But yes, I have read it, though there's not much to say, really. It's a great entry, and I don't see why it shouldn't be in the guide.

I especially liked the links to related sites as headings to the different sections. The only thing I could suggest, though, is a couple more headings.

Hey, thanks for taking a look! You're seeing it after several revisions - I'm afraid that it may still have traces of my source material, so every time I come across a sentence that sounds too press-releasey, I rewrite it. I'm not really sure that there's much else I can do to it!

So - was "vascals" a typo? I really do like this essay!

Thanks!

I don't remember if vascals was a typo - I'll have to take another look at the source... but you sound right. Vassals *looks* more correct.

An excellent read - my only comment is it might be easier for someone who has little knowlage of Joans story if the analyse of Joans life was in historical order.

Hi Almighty Rob,

This is, indeed, a great read, but sadly we've already got an Edited Entry on Joan of Arc, so this entry can't stand alone, but we will try and combine it with the existing one when we can. Sorry about that...

Hey, no worries Anna. I didn't expect it to get in alone, but I thought it was interesting nonetheless.

Editorial Note: This thread has been moved to Jimi's Update Headquarters because, well, it's relevant.

I know it's been a long time, but I couldn't for the life of me figure out how to incorporate this text into the existing Joan of Arc entry...

In talking with the italics about it, they agree and I'm going to send it back to Peer Review.



- Jimi X