h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Any comments - could it be better?

A few comments:

1. I have to say that overall the article reads a bit like a commercial rather than a factual description.
2. The plural form doesn't take an apostrophe, thus the plural of FMD is FMDs, _not_ FMD's.
3. Should be terabyte rather than terrabyte (from the SI prefixes: kilo-, mega-, giga-, tera-, etc.). Also, 1,000 GB, not MB.
4. "In the future of FMD there will most likely be another drive released (for reading FMD's). It will be called a WORM drive (Write Once Read Many)." WORM drive is a generic term, but this sentence implies that there is something special and unique here. I would suggest something more like "It is likely that a WORM drive will be developed in the future, giving FMD the same capability as CD-R gives to CD." Of course, this point is stylistic, so you may prefer to wait until a sub-ed or scout comments.
5. "Instead it uses fluorescent materials and can there for have more layers than DVD...." The word should be "therefore".
6. I think you need to explain the difference between coherent and incoherent light for someone who doesn't really understand what a laser is. Also, how you can detect incoherence. Also, how does a fluorescent material interact with a laser, etc.
7. "FMD disks can also be retooled to work with existing CD and DVD drives." I don't see this at all. Perhaps you should explain, or perhaps you mean that FMD drives can be re-tooled to read existing CD and DVD disks, which I could understand.