h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

13 inch? Mine's only 5...

I was referring to my Silver Surfer figurine thank you VERY much

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Surely in the first bit you should also include that some planets "might not be/are not" inhabited - for completeness sake.

think:
"Norrin had to become the herald of Galactus sure, but he also had to give up"
would read better
"Norrid had to become the herald of Galactus, which was fine, but he also.."

The first paragraph in Cosmic, Dude! repeats itself. I think it'd sound better if you added the elements of the last sentence to the bits above e.g.
"It enables him to channel ambient cosmic energy into his body at will, and expel it violently through a beam of energy as a concussive force with sufficient power to destroy a planet. He can also generate subtle amounts gently, as a means to restructure molecules and transmute elements according to his mental design, such as altering the natural pigments of a plant to change its colour.

Could the surfer lift 100 tons before he was given the Power Cosmic suit? And is his natural skin almost impenetrable (sp?) or is it after he donned the Power Cosmic?

Third paragraph of his powers tells us that he is "intrinsically aware aware of energies", he must be to be double aware

"since he absorbs life-maintaining cosmic energy direct through his skin."
Should that be directly? I'm not quite sure

The most influential seem to have been;
: instead of ;

If you're looking for a way to sum Galactus up as being not quite good or bad you could call him amoral. Then again, you could just not.
Not too keen on that last sentence on him either, bit too out of place I feel

Under Shalla-Bal: Galactus's>>>Galactus'

I wonder if Mephisto is a corruption of Mephistopholes the daemon, or maybe just a future reference to South Park :p

"It is they who do battle with the Silver Surfer and the Devourer of World's, but are instrumental in the plan to defeat Galactus and save the Earth."

'but' implies that the following sentence will be somewhat contrary to the preceeding one, whereas this follows on. I know it sounds nitpicky its just I see it on Wikipedia all the time because many bad writers contribute, or people contribute without reading the greater context. I wouldn't want to see h2g2 slipping standards. Use something like 'and'

Alicia 'awakens the real man inside of him' eh? eh? Wonder if she awoke his 13 inch statue too

Ah I wondered where Thanos came from, he pops up in Marvel Vs. Capcom 2 on the PS2, bloody awful he is too. Hmm, I prefer Milton's universe where it's Sin who is the woman and Death is her child by Satan: the diabolic trinity.

Could you fill us in on a little more backhistory, ie the first few episodes of Silver Surfer magazines and what happened, or a more detailed history of him. You have how he was created as a character, but not where he goes after there and what he does now he's stranded on Earth. I also feel this section should go before the characters but then that's just my tuppence worth.

Hope this bump gives this article a bit more attention

Addendum: Did you ever used to watch "Doug", the cartoon, about a decade ago? He occasionally dreamed himself as a spoof Superman character called Quailman and once or twice his best friend Skeeter used to turn up in it as a Silver Surfer parody, first time I became aware of the character and up until now still knew little about him other than his name. Thanks for filling in the gaps.

I've updated the Entry now with some of what you suggested, thanks, it does read much better now

I've left out any back history purposefully, because the Surfer is very much a 'man' of mystery in my eyes, and I don't want to give away too many plot lines in what I feel is simply an introduction to the character

And again, thanks for the !

MJ

Have reworded the intro now Any more comments?

MJ

Silver Surfer also refers to old folks who still surf the ocean with a surfboard.

You can't fly the Silver Surfboard without the Power Cosmic, but can you use it to catch some waves?

Hi Matt, knew nothing about the topic till I read the article.
just a few things I picked up on during reading:-

some might be, and

some might be and

some might be, and some are. Like Earth. And this goes for the comic book universe too, so when a huge

This sentence is somewhat messy and unclear,

some might be and some are like Earth. This goes for the comic book universe too, so when a huge

they sort of did, and didn't

they sort of did and didn't

of saviour, and that's

of saviour and that's

enemy of Earth, and the

enemy of Earth and the

Fantastic Four, but his

Fantastic Four but his

But, of course, there was a catch.

Of course there was a catch.

body at will, and expel

body at will and expel

revitalise himself, but his abilities

revitalise himself but his abilities

not really evil, but he's not

not really evil but he's not

beautiful woman. But after discovering

beautiful woman. After discovering

monster', and feels

monster' and feels

The Surfer, and Norrin

The Surfer and Norrin

a bar of it, and after

a bar of it and after

his herald. But, touched

his herald. Touched

That'll do for now, I'll come back to it later.

ST.

Hmm... this whole sentence really is quite jumbled and rather conversational:
"There's loads of planets in the Universe, some of them probably aren't inhabited, some might be, and some are. Like Earth"
It's one thing to write in your own style if that style is a particularly conversational one, but that doesn't always fit in with the House Style for edited entries. I don't think it would lessen the entry to rewrite that sentence along these lines:
'There are [insert suitably high number here] of planets in the Universe. Some of these probably aren't inhabited and others might be, but we know of one that most certainly is - the Earth'.

In fact, I think the whole introduction could be a lot tidier, but it's 11.30pm on Sunday and I've just come off a very hectic weekend of work, so I'm rather too tired to be grappling with the intricacies of the English language right now. A glass of late-bottled vintage would be preferable I reckon

What a pity I don't have one

for all involved. I've updated the Entry and made a few of the suggested changes. Thank you once again

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Excelsior!

Brill!

Congratulations Matt

Emmily

Coolness!

Congratulations Matt

And again