A Conversation for Maurice Ravel

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Post 1

J'au-æmne

Nice entry smiley - smiley I didn't know that Mother Goose was originally written for children to play...

These are my comments on this entry as far as style is concerned, just my opinion, though smiley - winkeye
I think you could dispense with the outline of the entry- I think the headers speak for themselves. Also the beginning of the 'biography' section should be in full sentences.

I like your assesment of his style; the only thing is I think you should explain what a pedal is. ie, most people would immediately think of the pedals on a piano & I'm sure thats not the kind you mean smiley - winkeye

About the piano to orchestra thing- you may want to mention that he also did it with other people's piano pieces, like Mussorsky's pictures at an exhibition.

About the pieces- you ~have~ to mention Bolero in more detail smiley - winkeye not doing so would be unfair to the audience smiley - winkeye

I really enjoyed this one, Kes, well done smiley - smiley


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Post 2

Kes

Many thanks for your comments, Joanna. smiley - bigeyes
There is such value in having another pair of eyes (and another brain) check out a piece of "solo" work!
I have adopted all you suggestions, and, as a result, the article now reads much better.
If you could spare the time for one more look - just in case I've missed something - I would be for ever grateful smiley - bigeyes honest! smiley - bigeyes
Thank you once more.


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Post 3

J'au-æmne

I've reread it and really enjoyed it. I believe that it should go in the 'edited' guide...smiley - smiley


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Post 4

Kes

Thank you. After the upgrade, I'll read the submission instructions for the "Brave New World" and get cracking. I wonder what to tackle next? Another day, another adventure ...


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Post 5

Kes

I have posted a mention of the Ravel article (A400645) on the Peer Review page (as per the new instructions. Let's see if anyone likes it!


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Post 6

J'au-æmne

well I'll have to go and endorse it now, won't I smiley - smiley 'cause its cool. Hopefully this may mean that ppl get more traffic to their pages too...


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