h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: pune - A3625274
Author: taandav - U1299600

please review this article with all the softness of a brick . maybe then i will improve

taandav,

It seems you're writing for h2g2 for the first time, and the article needs some serious thinking before it can be included here.
Here're some handy tips:

1. Please spell check your submissions first. (eg: "notins", "late ra s"), capitalize the first letter of proper nouns ("India", "Pune", "Osho" etc.). Apart from that, the article is teeming with grammatical mistakes.
2. When talking about cities, try not to confuse objective facts and your own subjective opinions.
3. Structure: Lay out content headingwise; people visiting that page will really appreciate it. (eg: geographical facts, how to reach, historical facts, eating joints, tourism, ethnographic info etc.)
4. If you are not sure about a fact, research and double-check it before including it in your article. ("...people outside india come here because of the osho commune with all its sex and drugs associations . i dont know much bout that though..")

While writing for an encyclopedia like h2g2, remember that you are holding a mirror representing the city of pune and all the people residing in it... be fair to everyone.

Hi taandav,

I hope you can perserve with developing this entry, because the H2G2 guide would definitely benefit from an entry such as this. Articles from Indian researchers are few and far between, and definitely welcome. I will take a look at your entry in more detail over the coming days to see where improvements can be made.

Cheers!

Woodpigeon

Hello, I'll be as soft as a brick.

1. Try to amalgamate this Entry with the new one you've just submitted.

2. Try to write in paragraphs to guide the reader better. That means separate them with a blank line! The same goes for headers. The best thing would be to learn GuideML (this is not strictly necessary though)...

3. Remove both Entries from PR, do the editing and resubmit them to PR (to keep PR nice and tidy).

My general comment is that we would all benefit from your Entry, just not in the format it is right now!

Good luck!

HELL

Taanday hasn't been back for a while now....

pity. How long until we can propose a move back to Entry? (This is too unfinished for FM, I think)

HELL

If we were being pedantic it would be tomorrow but I suppose there's no harm in proposing it now....

Back to entry, anyone?

Me.

H

email sent.