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Entry: Happy Tom Parker - A32381705
Author: dulcimer_dave - U9474987

As it is at the moment with the information I have this is complete. Is it still possible to edit if it is selected as a guide entry?

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lil x

Hi dulcimer_dave nice to meet you,

Peer review will do a fair bit of the editing, then if it is chosen the subeditor will give ite entry the final polish.

This is a nice entry very well done

If I may I think this paragraph
Thomas Parker was born in around 1808. His mother was Brigit Parker, formerly Brigit Perry, he was born in Bury St Edmunds. Somewhere between 1842 and 1845 he met his wife, Susanna Elizabeth Hodges

Would read better as
Thomas Parker was born in Bury St Edmunds around 1808, his mother was Brigit Parker, formerly Brigit Perry. Somewhere between 1842 and 1845 he met his wife, Susanna Elizabeth Hodges.

Thats all I can spot and so a fine entry



Bob

Thanks for that. My Dad was born in Maidstone, in Hardy street, near the prison. I think that makes him also a Man of Kent.

Thatnks for writing this. I've never heard of Happy Tom Parker before, so I look forward to learning about him.

The introduction section should talk about Tom, who he was, roughly when he lived and what he did, all in a few lines. This should be an overview, and interesting enough to grab the reader's attention and make him read on. It should start by talking about someone else, William Parker, because the entry isn't about William, it's about Tom.

Since you have chosen to put this into GuideML, there's quite a bit of tidy that can be done on it to make it look better, but this isn't too important. The important thing is to get the content right so that it grabs the reader and makes them read it.

Do avoid all-caps, though, it looks like shouting

Author last posted 22 Dec 08.

Propose move to Flea Market.

GB
Scout

Seconded

Apologies, on reflection this was moved from Peer Review a tad too soon. We've put the Entry back into Peer Review now so please continue the conversation here:
F48874?thread=6299686

Many thanks.

Other recommendations to the author of this: there's a bit of repetition, and a tad too much detail of censuses and so on. Try and concentrate a bit more on what Parker did, rather than who he was related to. For example, you mention his billing in the same show as Houdini. Can you find what it actually said on the poster?

I hope I have removed some of the repetition and also I have been given some suggestions as to where I may be able to go to fill in some detail between 1913 and 1944.