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Entry: C.B. Fry – Sportsman, Academic, Potential King and English Hero - A29200006
Author: boredlaura - 50000 words, 30 days, let's go! - U172849

A Flea Market Rescue.

Original entry: A19822999

Tidied, ordered and all guide ml-ed up now.

"he still top Hampshire's all time batting averages" - tops
"because their grounds, The Dell, were located conveniently close to his home" - ground
"He would also have played for England at rugby were it nor for injuries at the crucial time." - Which crucial time would that be?

Other than that, it looks pretty good. Could do with mentioning his descendant - Steven, as he also suffers from certain mental problems.

Changes done. The "critical time" came from the original author so I've reworded it now.

And aside from Stephen Fry's throwaway comment on QI I couldn't find any proof that they're actually related.

Ah right. Maybe they aren't then... Anyone know for certain?

Stephen has regularly referred to his famous predecessor.

I only spotted one missing word "would not a long-term solution to their problems" should either be "was not" or "would not provide"

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Incredibly he was released by Surrey as a young man, a decision that they were sure to regret over the next 20 years.



Title: CB Fry - Sportsman (house-style)

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Strictly speaking as Fry only equalled the record, he didn't hold it. There is no prize for equalling a record, only for breaking one. American Charles Reber, was therefore still the LJ record holder until 1894, when Irishman John Mooney captured it with a jump of 7.21 metres.

Neat entry

Six consecutive first-class centuries isn't unprecedented (unless you mean that it had never before happened when Fry did it).

Two men have done it since, Don Bradman and Mike Proctor.

I think that's exactly what unprecedented means Pin - it had never happened before

Points taken. Anything else?

Do we have a consensus on if Stephen Fry is related to CB Fry?

did you save the update? Only it still says <>

Your title should be:

CB Fry - Sportsman (that's house-style)

Sorry, your title won't survive as is, so you might as well change it

NOW, it should be fixed!

Also I just noticed:
After his retirement from the game he was once again invited to captain England, but declined pointing out that appointing a 49 year to captain the team would not provide a long-term solution to their problems.
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After his retirement from the game he was once again invited to captain England, but declined [insert comma] pointing out that appointing a 49 year [change to] 49-year-old to captain the team would not provide a long-term solution to their problems.

Done.

Excellent

Would you delete the double-quotes around your opening quote, and change the double-quotes around "grand old man of sport" at the end to single-quotes: 'grand old man of sport'

Thanks

In fact the Paxman quote should be:

Here surely, is an English Hero
- Jeremy Paxman

Done! It's all the obvious things that I know to look for but always forget!

This is just something I saw on QI ages ago, but Fry's party trick was to do a backwards somersault onto a mantlepiece from a standing position! That's worthy of a mention.

I love this. There are lots of small errors in the punctuation and grammar, but if a Scout wanted to recommend it I would be happy to Sub them out.

Well done; a fantastic rescue.

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