h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Any more?

Yes .

Downham West
You might as well write 'near' rather than 'nr Denver'.

'Little is known and it was likley that it was a settlement of timber-framed houses and a few trade buildings and shops.'
--> 'Little is know about the site, but it is likely that it was...'


Kempstone
'The settlement was on the southern shores of the Wash good connections had already been established before the Roman invasion. It was a small settlement of timber-framed houses and a few trade buildings warehouses.'

What do you mean by 'good connections'.
You're also missing an 'and' between 'buildings' and 'warehouses'.


Holme next to the Sea
Exactly the same sentence about the mysterious 'good connections'. In fact, this whole paragraph is very very similar to Kempstone's. I think this could do with some more variety.


Skegness
'The town was founded as a port and settlement good connections to the sea were important for trade. There is evidence for a port. '
--> 'The town was founded as a port with good connections to the sea - important for trade.' There is no need to say there is evidence for a port after saying it was founded as one.

'The settlement founded on the road connecting to Holme next the Sea an ferry point and a connection south to London.'
You've already said it was founded as a port, not a ferry point. And what do you mean about the road 'connecting to Holme next to the Sea'? I thought Skegness and Holme were connected via the ferry.

'It was a settlement of timber-framed houses and a few trade buildings warehouses and shops.'
That sentence is repeated many times throughout the entry, and misses out the 'and' as I mentioned above.


Horncastle
Full stop after 'defended settlement'.

'substantial defensive works similar to were built Portchester, good connections to the sea were important for trade'
--> 'Substantial defensive works, similar to those at Portchester, were built.' The bit about good connections to the sea is also another bit that's often repeated.

'but landing areas were possible' --> 'but there could have been landing areas present.'

'The settlement founded on the road connecting to Lincoln and the Fosse Way'
--> The settlement *was* [you often miss this out ] founded on the road connecting to Lincoln and the Fosse Way.


Lincoln
'the town was founded with good connections to London - (Londinium) via Ermine Street, trade flourished'
--> 'trade flourished thanks to good connections to London via Ermine Street'

'terminus of the Fosse Way and travellers had to continue north or south on Ermine Street.'
This sentence (like some others in the entry) feels very much like it's just a brief note rather than part of a whole body of text. --> 'Lincoln was the terminus of the Fosse Way. Travellers could continue north or south on Ermine Street.'


Right, that's it for my main sweep of corrections .

Hi laconian
Thanks for the work all done plus a little please comment

Are you planning on adding more to this in line with what you've done to the Ermine Street entry after Gnomon's suggestions?

As I take the points made I think I had better I will post again when done.

Hi laconian

Have a look at this please I have given it a tweek just finished not spell checked yet...

Looking forward to your comments.

Bob...

Hi Bob, are you ok with this now or is there more to do?




ST.

Can you see any gaps or areas lacking

Quite a lot of this is just a repeat of paragraphs from your other "Roman Road" entries, Bob.

Hi - I've just seen this on Gnomon's space. Did you ever get through to me re Caistor and did I miss it in my wanderings this summer? I have actually walked quite a lot of this one.
Caistor does not seem to have ever been called anything else.

I will have another look. There is little variation in detail I must try and say it in a different way.
I will be back

Hi Wand'rin star

To my egret I cant remember.

Please repeat the post and I will answer it again.

Apologies

Bob...

It's not a question of saying it in a different way, Bob, it's a question of not saying it at all. Why repeat your description of the Ermine Street and all the towns along it in yet another entry? It's already covered by the Ermine Street entry.

Are you saying - then just referance the other entry Ermine Street in the text rather than duplicate it. I was trying to make it a stand alone entry but that is failing by the nsound of it...

I will have a try and see what it looks like.

Please comment

Hi All the rethink looks like this Bosham A27450713
Please comment it avoids the duplication.

You've still repeated all the stuff about London.

Bob, this is just my opinion. I'd love someone else to comment.

I belived it was sufficently different, however I am more than happy to regegate it to the list.

What do you think of the list idea.

THis is what you said about London in Bosham to Lincoln entry:

Founded in 43 AD, It was constructed at a suitable point on the Thames where a bridge could be built using the islands in the river. Protected by substantial walls enclosing an area of of 145,000sq meters, and a legionary fort, Londinium's houses were mostly built from stone. It had many fine stone municipal buildings, including a governor's palace, theatres. The temples were dedicated to a variety of deities Jupiter, Cybele, Sol Invictus, Mithras, Mars, the Spirits of the Emperors and Isis.

London (Londinum Augusta) was originally founded in 43 AD, as a fort on the Thames at Southwick, there is evidence of three Legions in the city, the Second (Augusta), the Sixth (Victorious) and the Twentieth. Constructed at a suitable point on the Thames where a bridge could be built using the islands in the river. Londinium's houses were mostly built from stone. It had many fine stone municipal buildings, including a governor's palace and theatres. The streets were mainly paved. The town achieved the status of provincial capital in 190 AD. The city was of a 145,000sq meters, protected by substantial walls. Temples dedicated to a variety of deities including Jupiter, Cybele, Sol Invictus, Mithras, Mars, the Spirits of the Emperors and:

DEO ISIS
The God Isis whose temple had a souvenir trade as pottery with the inscription LONDINI AD FANVM ISIDIS has been found on the other side of the Thames in Kent.

The streets were paved. At this the time London's five land gates were established and their names and locations still survive. They are LudGate, New Gate, Alders Gate, Cripple Gate (the main gate from the Hadrianic legionary fort), Bishops Gate and AldGate. There was also a bridge over the Thames to the south of the city.


This is what you said in the Ermine Street entry:

Founded in 43 AD, London was originally established as a fort. There is evidence of three legions in the city, the Second (Augusta), the Sixth (Victorious) and the Twentieth. It was constructed at a suitable point on the Thames where a bridge could be built using the islands in the river. Protected by substantial walls enclosing an area of of 145,000 square metres, and a legionary fort, Londinium's houses were mostly built from stone. It had many fine stone municipal buildings, including a governor's palace, theatres. The temples were dedicated to a variety of deities: Jupiter, Cybele, Sol Invictus, Mithras, Mars, the Spirits of the Emperors and Isis.

LONDINI AD FANVM ISIDIS

From London the temple of Isis, this inscription was found inscribed on pottery in a settlement on Watling Street, on the Kent side of the Thames. This appears to indicate that there was a souvenir trade established near the temples in the city.

The streets were mainly paved. The town achieved the status of provincial capital in 190 AD and the city walls were started shortly after. At this time London's six land gates were established and their names and locations still survive. They are Lud Gate (now Ludgate), New Gate, Alders Gate (now part of the Barbican area), Cripple Gate2, Bishops Gate (now Bishopsgate, next to Liverpool Street) and Ald Gate (now Aldgate). Moorgate, another gate on the path of the London Wall, was constructed at a later date. There was also a bridge over the Thames to the south of the city.

That seems like duplication to me.



I'm tired of making this point. If some scout wants to pick your Entry, let them go ahead. But I feel that it is too repetitive with too little actual content.

Altered as suggested