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Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Started conversation Sep 10, 2004
Entry: Adding a new cat to your household without tears - A1361341
Author: Blackberry Cat, FMA, Patron Saint of Drinking for the Benefit of Others - U516189
my 2nd attempt at rewriting this wonderful piece, originally by CatCarouser, to make it acceptable for the Edited Guide
any advice on how to improve it gratefully recieved
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Sep 10, 2004
It's a good entry, and amusing, but I agree it needs some work.
Is the title really appropriate? What you are talking about is introducing a cat to a household that already has cats. Perhaps it should be called "Getting another Cat".
The entry is very unstructured. I find it very hard to read this because of the way it is broken up into so many little paragraphs. The opposite extreme of having it all in one big paragraph would be equally hard to read. What you need is a happy medium. Try grouping the text a bit more.
One way to do this is to add headers. The first section is the Introduction. (Due to a h2g2 rule, you don't put a header on this section). After that you could have "Cats Need Space", "Cats and Humans", "Introducing Kitty" etc. Once you've got the headers in places, start moving stuff around mercilessly so that it fits with the headers. Then see if some section hasn't got enough content and if so, write some more.
Looking at the content that's there:
I'd disagree with the statement that virtually all cat owners will have to face this challenge. I've lived with cats and people who owned cats all my life. Only one of them ever attempted to introduce a second cat into the household, (it was a dismal failure).
The American term "calico" is not well-known in Britain. The British term is tortoiseshell. You should use one and add the other as a footnote.
I haven't heard the word "fixed" before for "spayed", but I could see what it meant. You might consider just replacing it with spayed.
I don't recognise the Beach Boy reference. Perhaps a footnote could explain it?
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Posted Sep 10, 2004
lots of useful advice there, will get to work 
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
toxxin - ¡umop apisdn w,I 'aw dlaH Posted Sep 12, 2004
"Three girls for every boy", I suspect. Not sure of the song title, but that is the repeated refrain. 
toxx
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Scandrea Posted Sep 12, 2004
I think it was "Surf City," and it was "Two girls for every boy."
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Posted Sep 12, 2004
both
I shall google Surf City, see if I can find a copy of the lyrics somewhere
thats the trouble with completing someone elses entry, but at least I'm learning something new 
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Posted Sep 13, 2004
Seems like CatCarouser was wrong about this.
Apparently the Beach Boys 'Surfin' USA' was kept out of the top spot by Jan and Deans 'Surf City' which contained the line 'Two girls for every boy'.
If I change the reference from the Beach Boys to Jan and Dean will it have the same impact?
Perhaps I should just cut it?
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Sep 14, 2004
Change it to:
So Jan and DeanJan and Dean's number 1 hit, Surf City, had the line 'Two girls for every boy'. were onto something.
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Posted Sep 14, 2004
done
A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque Posted Sep 15, 2004
I'm looking at expanding the 'Finding your feline friend' section and adding some more weblinks next.
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Writing Workshop: A1361341 - Adding a new cat to your household without tears
- 1: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 10, 2004)
- 2: Gnomon - time to move on (Sep 10, 2004)
- 3: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 10, 2004)
- 4: toxxin - ¡umop apisdn w,I 'aw dlaH (Sep 12, 2004)
- 5: Scandrea (Sep 12, 2004)
- 6: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 12, 2004)
- 7: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 13, 2004)
- 8: Gnomon - time to move on (Sep 14, 2004)
- 9: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 14, 2004)
- 10: Blackberry Cat , if one wishes to remain an individual in the midst of the teeming multitudes, one must make oneself grotesque (Sep 15, 2004)
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