h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

cheers Zarquon, i've put in some subtitles and changed the s to s etc... any other suggestions?

and yeah, i got 7 A*s and 3 As!!!

Author still around?

It's been more than a year now that you have written this Entry. Some passages sound dated. Most people probably don't even remember the Episode. People from other parts of the world might not have heard of this at all. I suggest a small introductory paragraph - two, three sentences explaining the basic basics. Introduce David Blaine, and what his stunt was going to be.

Apart from that the Entry is not bad...

HELL

yeah i have been thinking about that... I have made some changes along the lines of your suggestion. Thanks for your input.

Deano

Thanks for the intro! This is starting to look really good.

The next steps:

1. The section "LONDON CALLING" introduces the stunt and the reaction of the mayor before the reader even knows what the stunt is. You explain this in the next section "First Stunt Outside USA". Maybe it would be better to restructure (invert?) these two sections so that the reader can follow.

2. GuideML technicalities and format (when PR comments start adressing these matters, it's a good sign ): Titles in EG Entries should not be in 'ALL CAPITALS'. Then I would suggest you to scrap the first header, and make the other ones HEADERS instead of SUBHEADERS. - The last two or three links could be placed between LINK tags. Those changes would save the sub-editor some work.



HELL

thanks for the feedback Hell. I'm off to India tonight so I will make some changes when I get back in January. Much appreciate the input.

Deano

See you in January then

HELL

hi i'm back! i see what you mean about the London Calling/first stunt outside USA paragraphs, so i've fiddled them around a bit. I think i've done what you said regarding GuideML, though i'm not entirely sure (its a bit too complicated for my small mind!)

any further suggestions would be much appreciated.

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HELL

cheers! thanks for all your help!