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Entry: Christopher Columbus - Explorer - Part Three - A1324685
Author: Jodan - The Royal H2G2 Historians Society - A1310149 - U201497

'lo all.
3 part Columbus project...

Part One - A1308368
Part Two - A1324676

I'll have a proper look at this when I get home, but it looks great from what I've seen!

I thought you didn't like having 'Part 1, Part 2' in the titles?



Caper Plip

Oh, I meant to say something, I'm being hypocrtical *sigh* I tried to figure out a title for each one, but what they got far too long.

You say (as I did in my "They Discovered America" entry) that Columbus is credited with discovering America but he never struck the Continent. This is wrong. (I'll have to get my entry changed). Because earlier you have described his trip along the coast of Panama. Panama is part of the continent of North America.

At the start of the fourth voyage he is in his 50s. Two and a half years later at the end, he is almost 70. There's something wrong here.

You mention that there is a city named after him in Ohio. You should also mention that there is an entire country named after him in South America.

The Latin quote of Columbus's last words should be moved slightly, as it comes before a sentence about him in court. Perhaps move it to after the paragraph in which he dies.

The rest of these comments are minor:

his fourth voyage to his death --> his fourth voyage until his death

were were --> were

a port at Africa --> a port in Africa

Ovando turned --> Ovando, turned

each ship of Columbus's ships --> all of Columbus's ships

Columbus and his squadron were repaired -- rephrase this

where some of the earliest native civilisations in the Americas --> inhabited by some of the earliest native civilisations in the Americas

this was well --> this as well

the ships was tossed around and wasn't safely along the coast --> the ships were tossed around and weren't safely along the coast

the bible --> the Bible

settled him down --> set him down

were grew organized and annoyed --> were organized and grew annoyed

Columbus encountered bad weather and Columbus set back one boat
--> he encountered bad weather and he set back one boat

Columbus' authority --> Columbus's authority (either is correct but you've used 's everywhere else)

pleasent --> pleasant

far to small --> far too small

All fixed

capitol district --> capital district

Columbia --> Colombia

Correcting the corrections... sheesh Those are done

Naked

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