h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: University of Glamorgan - A12350792
Author: benjaminpmoore - U3508889

Am I really the only person who went here? Having read this- would you?

"one of those machines you can get money out of. I don't know what they're called" an ATM

oops, and a few others:

"their used to be" there used to be

"the University has left itself with two halls of residence (well, each 'hall' is many different buildings, but let's not get bogged down with linguistics)" perahps it would be better explained in a footnote, along the lines of "each comprising several buildings, oddly enough"

"best visit:
The UCAS Website" would look better (IMHO) as "visit UCAS" with UCAS linked and with a footnote explaining what UCAS is.

Oh, and good entry.

I do seem to be in a bit of a tizzy tonight.

Good entry

A couple of things of first read through

"fridge/freezer, over, table and chairs" what's an "over"

"and, definitely, and experience" should read an experience

and I previewed that!

...ON firt read through

I'd suggest 'hole-in-the-wall' rather than ATM, because I think ATM is more an Americanism, whereas we Brits tend to say 'hole-in-the-wall'.

Or even cash machine, perhaps.

"one of those machines you can get money out of. I don't know what they're called"

I quite like it the way it is, it seems more in keeping with the tone of the piece!

I agree, perhaps with cash machine or whatever as a footnote?

Okay... made some changes. An 'over' is an oven. I agree that the 'not sure what it is' bit fits better with the piece but I'm not going to footnote it for the moment, unless people start to complain that they have no idea what I'm on about. I have footnoted the UCAS thing, though, for clarify. Thanks for the pointers, both.

'n' is nowhere near 'r' - how did you spell that wrong?

An interesting question. I believe my brain has developed some kind of 'predictive text' system. You will notice, if you study a history of my typos (which is one of my favourite entries) that I put 'a' 'an' and 'and' in fairly interchnagably despite two of those three letters being fairly seperate from the third. The odd thing is that I don't use predictive text on my phone at all.

It's quite normal: I also do it. (carefully avoids a an or ands)

I'm fairly sure that "one of those machines you can get money out of. I don't know what they're called." needs changing, in some way or other. First person isn't generally accepted in EG entries. Sorry. Perhaps "I don't know what they're called." could become a footnote, for example "whatever they may be called"

Damn, you're right! All that squabbling was for nothing! Oh we,, changed that, and a couple of other typos I spotted. Let the blood-letting begin afresh!

"atttrative" in the first paragraph

"from thence" - this could be just "thence" or it could be "from there"

"requiremnts" - requirements

"exhaulted" - exalted?

"Unsurprsingly" - unsurprisingly

"Don't panic-" could we have a space before the "-"?

"Educational, enjoyable and, definitely, an experience" This doesn't work, somehow. I can see what you're getting at, but...

and what does neuadd mean? hall?

Neuadd does indeed mean "hall"

Chnages duly made. Hyphen space is in. That last sentence is a piece of shite, frankly (skip past the sensors?) it needed changing. See what you think of the new one.

Brilliant.

The ending or the whole entry?