h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis - A11615735
Author: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont - U3926571

It got removed when I was elvised I added more to it and am putting ti back in the peer review

Previous PR thread: F4273961?thread=2934079

It's deja vu all over again

It's been a while since I read it, and it's certainly improved. My preference would be to turn the lists at the end into prose, but it's your call.

Don't like this. How about: "there are some things which can help alleviate the symptoms"?

Icy

ok edited it

By the way whats a prose

Prose means "not poetry".
The lines right now look like poetry because they're uneven and cut off at odd places. Unlike prose, which just march across the screen until they hit the end.

Thanks for telling.

Last time I posted this a lo tof people where saying the pronaounciation is wrong have I finally got it right

Traveller in Time reading the entry
"The entry is largely based on the lists, not much real text.

What is the subject again, half the entry is about the hoax of beeing the longest artificial word and the other half is about the disease itself.

It feels very thin, either about the longest word, what is the goal of knowing the longest word, is it anything good for ? What is this kind of disease, can you get it from digging in the garden, visiting a volcano, is it contageous ? "

a form of the illness pneumoconiosiscaused caused by >> pneumoconiosis caused by

Prounuciation looks fine

At the 103rd meeting in Hotel New Yorker in 1935 Pneumonoultra...osis >> Should be more like this: At the 103rd meeting [of the League (or group)] in Hotel New Yorker in 1935, Pneumonoultra...osis

But there is no record of medical literature containing the word. Which is why the word is suspected as a hoax. >> Please don't start a sentence with 'But'. You could combine these two sentences as well, the second one is only a sentence fragment.

There are four types of Pneumonoultra...osis Chronic,Asymptomatic, Acute and Accelerated. >> There are four types of Pneumonoultra...osis: chronic, asymptomatic, acute and accelerated.

The Pathology segment adds a hint of authenticity . That wasn't there before, was it?

silicon based radicals which releases compounds that damage to surrounding cells >> silicon-based radicals which release compounds that damage surrounding cells -- also, this sentence makes it sound like the hydrogen peroxide, hydroxyl and oxygen are the ones being damaged.

The symptoms bit would look better as incorporated text instead of an abstract list. Try starting it with 'Symptoms can include...' or 'Some sufferers may experience...'

somethings >> some things

I don't think there's a single complete sentence in the entire last paragraph.

Would it be worthwhile to draw a line between this and a severe cold or the flu? The symptoms can be attributed to the more common maladies, and I'd hate to give passing hypochondriacs the wrong idea. Just a thought.

This is looking much better, mr

To TiT: Im currently working on adding more to the entry and the only goal of knowign is the word is too say it to someone and confuse them.

To Milos: My grammars rubbish sorry i will work on it and make some changes to the article.

Traveller in Time beeing accused of cursing
"I tried to pronounce the word to my son, he can just read. He claims it sounds like a curse of some kind . "

Curses are usually shorter, for convenience in spewing.


Keep working, MR. And let us know when you're sick of it.

Still at it, mr?

Sorry ive been away so logn hope to start work on this again soon

Just did some grammatical updatifying and im startign to work on the hypochrondriac thingy

Hi MR - are you still working on this? It's been a long haul, but it looks almost ready to me.

Icy

Please do?

I forgot to write the hypochrondriac bit

well there wasnt really much to do on the hypochrondria bit so I just fitted it into the part about the symptoms.

P.S In the phrase "affect the nose and head" Does the head bit sound like im suggesting mental damage

So you're here, MR? Then I have a question: if, as you say, the word wasn't found in medical literature and therefore is a suspected hoax, then where does all the information about the disease come from? They added that afterwards, to create a definition for the word?!